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Rick
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since 2001-06-21

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Victoria, Australia

0 posted 2001-09-29 08:00 AM

Storm disrupted peace
As petals fell down earthward
Human darkness shown

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

1 posted 2001-09-29 08:14 AM

this line gives me a chill...
"as petals fell down earthward"...
those fallen bodies..they were all part of Gods planted garden..

wow..powerful little ditty my friend..

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"all you need is someone you can hold..dont be sad, youre not alone..i will be here for you..." mwsmith

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-09-29 09:21 AM

in faith they gave back
the greatest form of loving
in His hands they're held

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

3 posted 2001-09-29 09:31 AM

Strong expression of fragility scattered in such an inhumane manner. Hope will still bloom even under the blanket of darkness. Our light will be provided. Peace and Hugs.

Sincerely,
Regina

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-09-29 11:00 AM

superbly done. . .

words well found. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

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Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-09-29 08:26 PM

Very profound, Rick. I really don't think there are words to convey what people feel about the events of that day, but this comes close.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2001-09-30 07:30 AM

Rick~
Thank you~
Each day that should become easier ... doesn't~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

7 posted 2001-09-30 12:50 PM

this senryu and the accompanying comments hit me hard...

God bless America...

(a senryu follows the same 5-7-5 syllable count but is about anything else other than nature)

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2001-09-30 01:34 PM

Very well said. As fragile as the petal is, it can also be as strong as steel when its beauty and love touch your heart.

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

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lost in blue pages

9 posted 2001-09-30 01:41 PM

Very well said!!!

Charisma

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 2001-10-13 09:08 PM

Superbly expressed!

Maree

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

11 posted 2001-10-13 10:05 PM

You touch the soul of your reader with their own humanity. This is a masterpiece of emotion.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2001-10-13 10:21 PM

Powerful....could take this many ways...
So much within these few lines and syllables.
Nicely done.

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