Open Poetry #16 |
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I Cannot |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
I Cannot I cannot write of falling backwards, only of the roots of trees pushing the sidewalk up with their strong ties. I hide from crumpled newspaper that takes hold of the wind and blows it with words, words that cry into the streets of everywhere. The circumference of my neighborhood has changed. Each face is new now, changed with a bag of avocados at the door step, and the words, I’m sorry. With a harvest of apples it spreads sweet pie and bakes the crust just right this time and everyone gets a bite. I cannot write of empty spaces that were once filled with communities, and the thought of the water cooler and paper cups where laughter spread at ten and two. I look for something to grasp with words, but it is all so big, so huge, so monstrously cold, that I have to look down to my foot where the dog sleeps with one eye open, waiting for me to explain why the ball lays quiet on the teal carpet. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-26-2001).] |
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Auguste![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Dear friend, please know that I wish you many smiles. Nice work, Martie. (((hugs))) Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Martie, this spoke of the atmosphere in so many communities, homes, and hearts. I think a lot of people can identify with the change in attitudes, due to fear, and heartache. A sad write, but an excellent one as usual dear friend. There is hope always. ~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I find that I have felt this way. . . but, we must go on. . . well done. . . I like the flow and the picture that this shows. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done as usual Martie. We must have hope and the faith to go on.
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
You have expressed well the mixed up emotions of so many. And beautifully done I must say If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There are just some days that things like this need to be shared... and there are some of us who just understand... |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
And neither can I. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Fantastic write, Martie...you've done a wonderful job of expressing these feelings, which we're all much too familiar with these days... sp ![]() tried to write a letter |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
You wrote this so nicely Martie So many can relate these past few weeks ![]() |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
My oh my Martie... I cannot write of falling backwards, only of the roots of trees pushing the sidewalk up with their strong ties. I hide from crumpled newspaper that takes hold of the wind and blows it with words, words that cry into the streets of everywhere. I look for something to grasp with words, but it is all so big, so huge, so monstrously cold, that I have to look down to my foot where the dog sleeps with one eye open, waiting for me to explain why the ball lays quiet on the teal carpet. You make me sigh, sweet sweet lady ![]() Maree ![]() |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Martie~ what a poignant piece this is...you've painted a very quiet and shaken atmostphere...hopefully one that will mend and return back to normal in time. Hugs sweet poet, ~Krista ![]() Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ And I know ... 'I hide from crumpled newspaper that takes hold of the wind and blows it with words, words that cry into the streets of everywhere.' Tender ... oh, so tender~ Hugs, sweet sister of my heart~ ![]() ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I hide from crumpled newspaper that takes hold of the wind and blows it with words, words that cry into the streets of everywhere. The circumference of my neighborhood has changed. Each face is new now, changed with a bag of avocados at the door step, and the words, I’m sorry. With a harvest of apples it spreads sweet pie and bakes the crust just right this time and everyone gets a bite. I cannot write of empty spaces that were once filled with communities, and the thought of the water cooler and paper cups where laughter spread at ten and two. ====================================== "I Cannot" oh--YES you CAN ... and you DID. thy muse returns with wisdom and grace ![]() |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this much ![]() |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
And the winds of change challenge the breeze of hope, but we live..and the breeze is more comforting..A very good write to a gentle one..very gentle smile |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Gracious Lady of Poetry Again I become involved in your writing So beautiful and touching The roots of the trees lie much deeper than they appear Liz |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- This is such a tender and touching write. Just lovely, sweet friend. ![]() Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so wonderful, Martie. When I read your words I think of someone special because he thought so highly of you and your poetry. Missing him... "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Geez, Martie! You really hit the bullseye with this one. Yes, the enormity is too big, indeed. The dog only interested in the still ball is much more fortunate than we, at times. This is masterfully done, dear poet....possibly the best poem on the topic I have seen... |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
This is refreshing verse full of stark images and realism! |
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