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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Silence There is more than coincidence To account for the inclusion, As sound, In what effectively amounts to silence. I place my hand against a wall And feel the warmth where you once leaned. I listen As the sea responds With long, stone breaks That resonate into the sky Then slant returns Wide and separate in the distance. I walk the cliffs, Where open mouthed I kiss the wind That you once breathed. Nothing. Only this Fierce Absence. RMW |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bob---so much of interest in this. I have read it three times, and see such a sad seperate, not inclusion. It touched me, non the less. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I walk the cliffs, Where open mouthed I kiss the wind That you once breathed. WOW!! This is sooo breathtakingly beautiful! Great write....thank you for sharing. ~Nancy~
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RMW~ 'I place my hand against a wall And feel the warmth where you once leaned.' How your thoughts touch me tenderly~ Thank you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminded me of the times when I miss someone special...I remember the times she sat next to me on the couch and rubbed my feet...James |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You paint a void very well....very well, indeed! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
To account for the inclusion, As sound, In what effectively amounts to silence Bob... more to say about this one than I have words to say it with... just suffice it to say it is a wonderful piece..and one I think I will save..to read again and again.. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you all very much. This was one of those that we write in a rush of emotion to capture ..... something. As such, I questioned it's interest, let alone quality. I'm glad that you all have seen some merit. Bob |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
RMW- What a lovely and tender write. Very touching. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Loved this, Robere... ~Tier |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Oh, sure, Bob - make the ladies swoon and raised the stakes a notch will ya! This poem has great similes and imagery. I really like the way you convey the loss and loneliness. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
How very haunting and lonely this is, Bob. Cor |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
Well, this lady definitely swooned. This is lovely. |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Absolutely, positively Romantic!! Nice wording. Warm smiles, ~Marie~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Bob, this is so sadly beautiful ... nothing for me to say except well writ and Semper Fi. |
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