Open Poetry #16 |
Lost in the Wood |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Do you understand my flicks of flame sparks of pleasure and disdain illumination brief in trees lighting up the leaves however brief? The flint, it strikes against the stone sparks leave me not quite alone amidst the crisp dried forest leaves I gently blow, forgetting how to breathe... upon my knees in need. And so I gather me a home a bed of moss and circled stone... wood at ready for the feed of fire in a shadow's bleed-- I find myself a crook of tree and pray the dawn will soon free me from me... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRAVO! The cadence is perfect, and the imagery delightful. You shake a few trees and look what falls down in our laps, these tasty treasures! Take a bow... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
k And you want to go off and write the GAN? No, say it ain't so! You do, and we're all going to miss this sweet talent of yours! But if you must . . . But you CAN'T stop doing this, k !!! e "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I echo what Krawdad says... It's gonna be tuff not reading your poems typed rite-off the keyboard each nite but a gurl's gotta do what a gurl's gotta do and SweetSerenity you do it perfectlllllllly... Hugs2u *~coco~* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing serenity...James |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now this is poetry, and I can't wait to read your novel. You'll do it and I am so proud of you for being tenacious enough to give it your best! Good Luck Karen (but don't think you are going to need much), you'll do it! ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wahoo you go girl! Excellent writing m'dear, loved the flow of this. Absolutely wonderful! Maree |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Wow Karen, you're writing a novel? (sigh) Wow, I can't wait to see you're finished, for I would love to be one of the first to purchase a copy! (sigh) BRAVO!!! I love your words always! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet serenity, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karen, simply a delight to read...flowing well through the words...nicely done gurl. |
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