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Robert William Gruhn
Member

since 2001-11-06

Posts 168
California, USA

0 posted 2001-11-09 07:47 PM

Step into my mind
Please
Make yourself comfortable
On any thought you'd like

Sorry about that view
From behind my eyes
Seeing my smile difficult
Through blinding tears

By the way
Love once lived here
Hard to tell
Now

So many depressions left
On this brain's cushion
What's that
Sure, you can smoke

What's a thousand cells
Give or take a few gray matter miracles
Won't be using most of them anyway
By the way, how did you find me

Most friends thought
My mind was vacant
Sure
You are welcome anytime

Just be very careful
Next time you knock
Your lovely face
May wake my heart

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-11-09 07:52 PM

I like the last few lines especially

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"
also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2001-11-09 09:10 PM

Most friends thought
My mind was vacant
Sure
You are welcome anytime

Just be very careful
Next time you knock
Your lovely face
May wake my heart
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Robert! I truly enjoyed this piece and the way in which you presented it! Very well done! ~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2001-11-09 09:24 PM

(big hugggssssss) It's always so wonderful to share each others thoughts, and yours are always a pleasure to cherish! (sigh) May we all together feel the love and the imagination from each other! (smiles) BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet brother, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-11-09 09:57 PM

Wow, powerful ending!! Nicely done, Robert.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

5 posted 2001-11-12 01:07 AM

Sir Robert,
Great write.

wornways
Member

since 2001-10-18

Posts 204
CA, USA

6 posted 2001-11-12 08:33 AM

ah that waking face
alluring wondrous terror
wake with care robert

[This message has been edited by wornways (edited 11-12-2001).]

Accordionmaid
Member

since 2001-10-28

Posts 153
MA/USA

7 posted 2001-11-12 08:42 AM

Maybe this is what I should say. I'm usually complaining that I'd like people to get out of my head. (Mostly, just the ones who specifically tell me they "just love to get inside peoples' heads.) Hmm...maybe that's why I need the eyedrops...anyway, this is a wonderful poem and I really enjoyed reading it.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

8 posted 2001-11-12 10:06 AM

I love it when you walk me through your mind. There is so much to see and enjoy about you. BRAVO!!! Another great poem from, Sir Robert. I love it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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