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Hollowman Member
since 2001-06-01
Posts 117 |
The joker stands before me the queen of hearts by his side in her soft hands she holds the cards of fate for I Which one I choose I just don't know for fate is fate, and lifes a show time to grab life before it slips away and night moves in to rid the day There was a time when I was young and time was endless, as the sun now years have passed, and lessons learnt emotions tainted and fingers burnt Yet smile I do, and no bitterness I hold these lessons I have learnt are now stories told to others they listen, and see my life a kalidascope of colours that glow so bright Time to dig in my heels, and make my mark upon this world as if a spark to bring some hope to those who cant see the light to those who cry long into the night The time will pass, another ten years will drift by and forty years old shall be I but the Queen and the Jester will still be here to watch my days pass and wipe my tears And one day I will draw my final breath and shake the soft, calm hand of death he'll smile and whisper, words to me the words that ultimatley set me free Embracing the darkness as once before my breath runs out and I am no more... Richy 01. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
time to dig in my heels and make my mark upon this world as if a spark to bring some hope to those who cannot see light to those who cry long into the night Great words.you are making your mark with your words.Keep it up. Peaches |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I love the way you've expressed yourself in this poem. There was a part that really hit home "Yet smile I do, and no bitterness I hold these lessons I have learnt are now stories told to others they listen, and see my life a kalidascope of colours that glow so bright" Excellent write! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This is wonderful work!! Really makes you think and I'm all for a challenge. Great job!  All writing comes |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Holowman- this was a powerful write...i really liked the images you presented here. this flowed so smoothly and there were a lot of lines i particulary liked, but this one stood out among the rest to me "There was a time when I was young and time was endless, as the sun now years have passed, and lessons learnt emotions tainted and fingers burnt" Just awesome!! take care. Amy "I could kiss you in |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Some nice lines and phrases here, Hollowman. I enjoyed. "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Good write Richy. A lot of pondering of life in this. But I think you hit the nail on the head with these lines: Yet smile I do, and no bitterness I hold these lessons I have learnt are now stories told to others they listen, and see my life a kalidascope of colours that glow so bright There are so many lessons to be learned in life. And every one of lifes pathways is a new lesson to be learned. And may we never stop learning til we draw the final breath. Which one I choose I just don't know for fate is fate, and lifes a show time to grab life before it slips away and night moves in to rid the day Those lines speak to me loudly. Grab on to the brass ring of life and live it to the fullest. I believe you do... and may you never stop. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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