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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Scarlet Moon By: Noah Eaton 11/2/01 I’m drowning in shallows Amidst these burning bridges Waltzing within forsaken shadows Where the night is dismissed Dusted picture frames Broken toys and dog-eared baseball cards and runes All my youth is an ivory ship sinking In the heart of a bleeding scarlet moon And the snow is rough as steel Embers of light are glass cutting against my skin The denigration of imagination The austerity of innocence cuts thin Buried deep in this wreckage Crying for the Good Lord to bring my righteousness Watch the high noon burn like a cherry star Pleading for noonday’s justice to offer me selflessness There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it back There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it back And my heart is crying I’m losing all my rationale And I wave an open glove to the future But I feel all my dreams melt I search for the end of the tunnel Trampling on the copper rails for a train Uncertainty cuts me open like a scalpel I am walking in the icy rain I look out for love Behind these ebony curtains Havoc melodramas reproach me I feel so disillusioned My memories slave on a hot stove Like smelling the rice burn Jesus, give me a blessing Will I ever learn? There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it back There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it There’s no way to bring it back Will there be a way That I could fall in love someday? I reach my hand out And kiss all the stars in praise And I watch as the moon Bleeds and cries in shame I turn off the light now In my cold isolated bed I’ve scattered all my marbles From a sack of prayers I hold when I feel mislead And I toss and turn Without a loving hand to hold I watch my moon bleed and shiver With the blood of my shattered youth I have known… [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (edited 11-02-2001).] |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Noah, you have a very good way of leaving the cliches' out of your work. You also write with the soul of a much more mature person. I dont mean that you are not mature, just young. you have a certain sophistication about your pen that speaks beautifully of your heart. very well done..... Look into the eyes of a man and |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, Noah!!! This was fabulous!!! You have captured the feelings of a loss of love perfectly here. Very profound and powerful writing. Bravo!!  All writing comes |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very, very good my friend...your best thus far in my eyes...loved it. jwesley |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
A poem from deep within your heart and soul about lost love. Very well written, Noah. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Noah, oh gosh...words can't describe how well this poem has been written. your vocabulary, rhyme, cadence, everything was superb...not to mention the emotions from this literally leapt off the page. just a lovely write sweetie... take care. amy "I could kiss you in |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Thank you all so much for your comments and enthusiasm! This poem is not about lost love; but more in general lost life. This is about my feelings now, with a shattered boyhood and no memories now, and I have been feeling very depressed lately that I may never be loved in general, not just by my love but by anybody. (sigh) Thank you all for the understanding; I love you all! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Noah, you are a magnificent poet. The depth of your passion and emotion is always apparent, but more so in this post than all the others. But don't despair, for youthful passion and angst often mellow with time. (DRATS!) You are on a pathway of emotional growth that is unique to you. No one else can be you, and few can express their emotions as well as you do.   |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A strong outpouring of your feelings...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Noah, it has all been said, but I feel your pain here, and I understand. And just the fact that you are able to write and share poems at this point of your life is a very big think. It will save you for all kinds of lonliness and despair. Hang in their dear friend. You write like a sad angel, but you will be happy again. Sandra |
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