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0 posted 2001-11-02 10:02 PM




Scarlet Moon
By: Noah Eaton
11/2/01

I’m drowning in shallows
Amidst these burning bridges
Waltzing within forsaken shadows
Where the night is dismissed

Dusted picture frames
Broken toys and dog-eared baseball cards and runes
All my youth is an ivory ship sinking
In the heart of a bleeding scarlet moon

And the snow is rough as steel
Embers of light are glass cutting against my skin
The denigration of imagination
The austerity of innocence cuts thin

Buried deep in this wreckage
Crying for the Good Lord to bring my righteousness
Watch the high noon burn like a cherry star
Pleading for noonday’s justice to offer me selflessness

There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it back
There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it back

And my heart is crying
I’m losing all my rationale
And I wave an open glove to the future
But I feel all my dreams melt

I search for the end of the tunnel
Trampling on the copper rails for a train
Uncertainty cuts me open like a scalpel
I am walking in the icy rain

I look out for love
Behind these ebony curtains
Havoc melodramas reproach me
I feel so disillusioned

My memories slave on a hot stove
Like smelling the rice burn
Jesus, give me a blessing
Will I ever learn?

There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it back
There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it
There’s no way to bring it back
Will there be a way
That I could fall in love someday?

I reach my hand out
And kiss all the stars in praise
And I watch as the moon
Bleeds and cries in shame

I turn off the light now
In my cold isolated bed
I’ve scattered all my marbles
From a sack of prayers I hold when I feel mislead

And I toss and turn
Without a loving hand to hold
I watch my moon bleed and shiver
With the blood of my shattered youth I have known…



[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (edited 11-02-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-11-02 10:06 PM


Noah,

you have a very good way of leaving the cliches' out of your work. You also write with the soul of a much more mature person. I dont mean that you are not mature, just young. you have a certain sophistication about your pen that speaks beautifully of your heart.
very well done.....

Look into the eyes of a man and
you will find the soul of the woman
who loves him...

Lone Wolf
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2 posted 2001-11-02 10:06 PM


Wow, Noah!!!  This was fabulous!!!  You have captured the feelings of a loss of love perfectly here.  Very profound and powerful writing.  Bravo!!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

jwesley
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3 posted 2001-11-02 10:17 PM


Very, very good my friend...your best thus far in my eyes...loved it.

jwesley



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4 posted 2001-11-02 10:25 PM


A poem from deep within your heart and soul about lost love. Very well written, Noah.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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5 posted 2001-11-02 10:47 PM


Noah,

oh gosh...words can't describe how
well this poem has been written. your
vocabulary, rhyme, cadence, everything
was superb...not to mention the emotions
from this literally leapt off the page.
just a lovely write sweetie...

take care.
amy  

"I could kiss you in
the rain forever.
Turn all of your pain to pleasure
Fill up your days with
sunlight, make the
passion last every night"

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6 posted 2001-11-02 10:53 PM


Thank you all so much for your comments and enthusiasm! This poem is not about lost love; but more in general lost life. This is about my feelings now, with a shattered boyhood and no memories now, and I have been feeling very depressed lately that I may never be loved in general, not just by my love but by anybody. (sigh) Thank you all for the understanding; I love you all!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2001-11-02 10:55 PM


Noah, you are a magnificent poet. The depth of your passion and emotion is always apparent, but more so in this post than all the others.  But don't despair, for youthful passion and angst often mellow with time. (DRATS!) You are on a pathway of emotional growth that is unique to you. No one else can be you, and few can express their emotions as well as you do.
      

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8 posted 2001-11-03 03:04 AM


A strong outpouring of your feelings...James
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9 posted 2001-11-03 05:22 AM


Noah, it has all been said, but I feel your pain here, and I understand. And just the fact that you are able to write and share poems at this point of your life is a very big think. It will save you for all kinds of lonliness and despair. Hang in their dear friend. You write like a sad angel, but you will be happy again.
Sandra

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