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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-11-01 11:55 AM

Needs

She has
grown to nine
though gangles not
bearing well,
she
spread her holiday
by cheering all
in costumed grace
painted face

left me wondering
again

at how you
walked
away

it is not her fault
you claiming
not yours, either

still I try to instant her
dreams
we elastic our imaginations
making wrongs
right

it is not her fault
and not yours
both suffering
one’s mental defect

but by neglect
of what you could do
for you

you both lose

but promises stand
she’ll see ten

then more

by me

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2001-11-01 12:17 PM

This line really jumps out.
'we elastic our imaginations
making wrongs
right'
You have some very interesting poetic imagery, decaflame...And this poem is a no exception. I enjoy reading your unique poetry.

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

2 posted 2001-11-01 12:52 PM

Recognition of the needs of others is one of the higher attributes you can have, you have put everything quite well, here, Decaflame. very nice write..very gentle smile

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-11-01 12:55 PM

1derful write Deca, tactile.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2001-11-01 05:27 PM

"but promises stand
she’ll see ten

then more

by me"

Deca..so stark, yet poignant..gave me chills. Hugs!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2001-11-01 05:54 PM

ahhhhhhh..such a warm heart you have..I love the feel of this from you, despite knowing someone doesnt acknowledge this angel.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2001-11-01 07:15 PM

"left me wondering
again

at how you
walked
away

it is not her fault
you claiming
not yours, either"

wow.....

(sorry intelligent sounding, but it fits)

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2001-11-01 07:22 PM

Oh I understand, I raised a girl alone, too. And you touched this feeling so well.
Sandra

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

8 posted 2001-11-01 07:58 PM

not her fault...not yours..

It is heartbreaking indeed, Decaflame, but we can only do what we can do and keep hopes alive and fingers crossed....

Perhaps one day.......

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

9 posted 2001-11-01 08:28 PM

I know this one deeply...My beauty is 13...she is the best of anything he ever was or ever will be...and I make sure she knows it everyday...by me too. Loved this Deca.

Sincerely,
Regina

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