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in the dark |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
His hands frame her face. She closes her eyes, smiles but asks that the lamp be dimmed. There is no touch up here, no facade, and yet she feels…. In the dark she’ll be beautiful. He mustn’t see her scars and maybe, just maybe he won’t feel all the bones that were broken. He won’t see the bruises that she remembers, even though they have faded through the years, or her swelled lips she bites nervously, and in the dark she’ll be beautiful. Like vintage haze, her breath begins to trail along his shoulders. She utters every nuance from every tide ever pulled to shore as he draws her to him- her chin resting just below his. His tongue searches,- demands, softly- hers. Their hands fold, one over the other and the stars spill enough light, just enough. He begins- licking each finger, knowing.. learning… exploring… Someday, he’ll make love to her in the sun, as rays murmur invisibly and through a lavender iris, her soul is once again, reflected. But for now, just this time, their first time she feels more beautiful- in the dark. [This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-31-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh my gosh this is so incredibly beautiful. I wept as I understood her need for the dark. *sigh* a powerful poem that amazes me with its ability to touch my soul. Thank you for sharing it with me. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow. You've penned intense feelings here. Wish I could say I didn't understand these emotions. |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
This is a very very good read!!!!!!!!! |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
this i ilke thank you for it arthur |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
Startime: thank you for your kind words, most women I guess can relate. Midnitesun: Thank you also, yes, they seem to be universal emotions don’t they? Windwalker, thank you Arthur, well, I’m glad you had time to read and reply, I appreciate it. Thank you. -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
OMG! "VINTAGE HAZE"! I LOVE IT!! This is absolutely wonderful! I can just FEEL every one of your poems, Lady!  Come to think of it, I have a thing about being loved in the dark also. It doesn't really concern scars or bruises but still...Ahh..I enjoyed this. You keep writing. I'll keep reading. Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the darkness can reveal more than we can imagine. . . well done. . . a soulful and passionte poem. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Have to agree with Jen, 'vintage haze'...incredible. I always enjoy your poetry, this one speaks sadly but still with hope of love's renewal. Well done, Lady. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very well written. I really understand this. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Great writing of the soul here. Beautifully done. I'm sure he wouldn't have noticed the scars, but I understand the thoughts anyway If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
Jenn, thank you for that high praise, I'm thrilled you liked this. If you enjoyed it, that's all that matters! Sven, yes, it certainly can, thank you for replying. Duncan, thank you also and I'm glad you liked the image I was trying to project. Smart Chick, thank you so much! Tracey, this was a hard one to write, I wrote it about a year ago and then just kind of sat on it, could never share it, but at this point it doesn't seem to matter, so I thought I would. Thank you for replying. -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Robert A Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 174 |
Well, I for one hope this wasn't real, it sure sounds like it. A woman deserves to be treated just like you describe here....one of these days I'll get up enough nerve to post one of my lousy poems! This is tender...and so is the poet who wrote it, unless I'm way off. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lady of Shallot, Lovely as always. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Lady! This is incredibly beautiful...I know exactly the thoughts and feelings worded here. Just amazing how you can put them on paper!...or computer, whatever....truly an enjoyable write! ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Those thoughts are not reserved just for women. We guys have had such thoughts as well. I loved it Lady of Shallot and, like another, I sincerely hope it was all from your muse and not your past. ~*~ accept my love dear I love the woman inside she attracted me Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
Robert, by all means, post and no poem is lousy! yes, for some women, this is real, doesn’t really matter whether it is for me, important thing is that someone out there knows it’s ok to be shy – and still feel beautiful! thank you for reading~ Chris, I’m glad you enjoyed, thank you! Enchantress, that is a nice thing to say, thank you for the encouragement, Interloper, thank you for the verse, it’s lovely and the past cannot hurt us anymore now can it? -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Robert A Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 174 |
I had to come back to see if this was real, you eluded to it.....it's so sad, really got to me. |
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