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Martie
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0 posted 2001-10-28 10:20 PM





Forever

The rocks all fuzzy green with moss, her dress.
Her laugh, the soft slip of riffled water.
Alder trees, green and insect chewed
until they are like lace, her bed.

Her song is the wind,
that moves, pushed by invisible hands
that dance with beguile.
Her jeweled slippers
are made from dappled light.

She has frolicked here with someone,
for a damn is built of rocks,
child tossed with gleeful jump and splash.

In the peace of river’s satin finish
a leaf falls,
the ripples circle out
until they touch my heart.

They are proof of forever.
________
for Michelle



and so I just know
that love never dies
and that souls hold all the candles
and they are the kind
you can’t blow out

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 10-28-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-28 10:30 PM


She has frolicked here with someone,
for a damn is built of rocks,
child tossed with gleeful jump and splash.

In the peace of river’s satin finish
a leaf falls,
the ripples circle out
until they touch my heart.

They are proof of forever.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Martie, No words can express what I am feeling.  I will just say God Bless You and comfort you...you have such beautiful memories of Michelle.  
~warm comforting hugs, Nancy~

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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2 posted 2001-10-28 10:35 PM


A beautiful write, Martie  

(I edited your post to put the pic here on the page, which I feel you may have wanted. If I erred, let me know)

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3 posted 2001-10-28 11:32 PM


Truly a beautiful write Martie. Michelle will always be very lucky to have you as a mother even in death.

                       Dawn

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4 posted 2001-10-28 11:51 PM


"Her laugh, the soft slip of riffled water."

WOW !

You have superb vision, Martie.  It's so nice to find your wonderful work here.

e

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5 posted 2001-10-29 10:08 AM



I could see the lace of the bed so well, for I have walked these woods, and know well the treasures you have found...

thank you for this Martie!

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6 posted 2001-10-29 10:20 AM


Her song is the wind,
that moves, pushed by invisible hands
that dance with beguile.

This touches me deeply, Martie... Your love paints such amazing images.

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2001-10-29 11:10 AM


Martie,
You write like a butterfly flies. *L*

Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 2001-10-29 11:44 AM


WOW...

what splendid imagery... you are GIFTED, for sure... and remarkably so... how much I envy you...

Regards Martie,
Sudihr

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9 posted 2001-10-29 12:33 PM


Her song is the wind,
that moves, pushed by invisible hands
that dance with beguile.
Her jeweled slippers
are made from dappled light.

She has frolicked here with someone,
for a damn is built of rocks,
child tossed with gleeful jump and splash.

In the peace of river’s satin finish
a leaf falls,
the ripples circle out
until they touch my heart.

They are proof of forever.
============================

as are your words(proof of forever)
and this beauty is yet another to go into my butterfly collection...
another rose for my garden of Michelle  
me

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

Robert A
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10 posted 2001-10-29 01:04 PM


yeah, great imagery and descriptive sentences, I see there is alot of poetry in different styles here, kind of like different emotions flying all over the pages!  I like it.
vlraynes
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11 posted 2001-10-29 01:13 PM



Martie-
   Oh, what a beauty this is...a perfectly
   lovely 'proof of forever' indeed.
   You've written the scene so vividly, sweet friend.
   I can see her dancing there.
   Another gorgeous masterpiece for Michelle.
   Love and hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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12 posted 2001-10-29 01:48 PM


Martie, 'her jeweled slippers'
'are made from dappled light'  this is so lovely. Your writing amazes and delights me, and often as to-day, brings a tear to my eye. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Wanda
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13 posted 2001-10-29 02:18 PM


How beautiful this poem is.  What wonderful memories you share with us.  This is a delight to read.  Thank you.  Wanda
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14 posted 2001-10-29 03:52 PM


O Martie, how beautiful this is... I can see Michelle frolicking around over the rocks. This played a tune with my heart-strings Martie.

Beautiful

Maree  

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15 posted 2001-10-30 11:06 PM


Martie~
Sweet sister of my heart ...

Your heart is so pretty when sprinkled with the magic dust of Michelle's spirit~
I love you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
   noles1@totcon.com              

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