What Words (inspired by RSWells poem Unclaimed Passage)

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Startime
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since 2000-10-03

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0 posted 2001-10-26 11:09 PM

What Words

What words of thine that now burn on the page
do take me to a time now long forgot?
Such wisdom came from those once called a sage,
to know of when or where my mind cannot

With jester's grin you seek to hide your pain
of one whose countenance you did not kiss
And declare to all that you'll not abstain
from seeking for a love to bring you bliss

What quest for answers do your words extol
as you move among flowers sweet and rare?
Such is your search among them all your goal
while understanding much you are aware

Still in your heart is burning strong the hurt
as you struggle from darkness into light
You'll live, and empty tragedy avert
while feelings grow and passions you invite

Karen Torbiak 2001©

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2001-10-26 11:14 PM

(sigh) We all will live indeed, and only time will tell all the love and passions mean to all our hearts, no matter what we must surmount our hearts beat with pride and determination! (smiles) Wonderful inspiration, sweet Karen! (kiss on cheek) I love it! God Bless You this evening! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet star, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-10-27 08:30 AM

This surely needs to be seen more..What a wonderful poem. Off page 5 I say-OFF!

Sandra

Wanda
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 461

3 posted 2001-10-27 08:57 AM

Karen; You express the longing for a love that can be seen, touched, and held so well. I wish that for you. What a poem!! Wanda

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

4 posted 2001-10-27 09:00 AM

A blushing thank you for such exposory verse and the flattering nod to subtle inspiration.
Yesterday was rhyme day, sometimes I can't help myself.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2001-10-27 09:07 AM

Karen,
A wonderful write, I truely enjoyed.

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

6 posted 2001-10-27 10:05 AM

Dear Karen, you write with such a passion and sincerity, you bring light to lost souls and a smile to broken hearts.
A great write, let us read more.

Sincerely
Rick

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2001-10-27 10:17 AM

Noah....you are so right. Time will tell. I am glad you enjoyed this one.

Sandra....*giggling* well thank you for bringing this one back from the land of beyond. **hugs**to you, my friend.

Wanda....time moves on and if it is to happen it will. In the meantime I will weave dreams from my heart and wish on the stars. Thank you so much, I love your comments.

RSWElls....you are very welcome. Your words paint clear pictures to me and when written in a way that draws me into the past like that I lose myself in them. Your heart was so clear in that one. I am glad you like this poem.

Seymour....*grin* I always feel I have done well when I see you have commented. Thank you, kind Sir.

Rick....*sigh* your compliment warms my heart. Having read your work I consider it a honor that you feel the words I write. I will be looking forward to much more of your work.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2001-10-27 11:03 AM

You sure "nailed this one", and it was simply fantastic. You did hear his poem, read between the lines, and got right to the core of the feelings in it, to produce this poem. It is one thing to be able to write, and quite another to be able to read well, and you do both extremely well.

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

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Hurricane Alley

9 posted 2001-10-27 11:29 AM

I really enjoyed this!

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

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Somewhere... out there...

10 posted 2001-11-01 02:15 PM

Startime-
   Beautifully penned thoughts here.
   Much enjoyed this.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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