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Yoda |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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How I feel, this may be A little sad, that is me But in the night, when I cry In this bed, where I lie Make believe, I cannot do Kissing, holding, only you DVD, on the screen Watching Muppet, colored green In his wisdom, I can hear Down my cheek, rolls a tear “Try not! Do, There is no try!” So his smartness, I apply Picking up the phone, I dial Leapt, my heart, maybe a mile Chalk and dust, are in my throat A little poem, is what I wrote Lucky, though a little scared Thank the goodness I’m prepared From the phone, I hear a voice A stupid movie, I had no choice The force was wise, Yoda said But now its static, in my head “Hello”, I hear “Hello” “Hello”? Melodious voice of stringed cellos! A stumble meets my words at first A ramble comes but maybe worse Her name, I can not yet remember Last we met was late December In my head a sudden bliss Obi Wan says, “Jenn, it is!” My pretty poem, I begin to say But words of song don’t often play When “Walt” my name I think I heard From my mouth, the only word “Remember you, I do,” says she The words, just right, she says to me “By this phone I would wait But afraid, I am, you are too late Came December then the Spring A man, I met, and had a fling Under his skin of green I got And then a ring he went and bought When giving birth I thought I’d die He said,“Try not! There is no try!” In love I fell, his words were wise Came the baby in two more tries Mad at me I hope your not Forget me now not e’er a thought” The phone it fell down to the floor All she said and nothing more In my head a whisper came From Obi Wan, that trickster’s name “If Vader had not killed me dead She would have been my sweet red-head” From Yoda’s words “Use the Force” I forced my shoe into the source The TV that played the DVD Was now a wreck in front of me But for all the sadness and my fate At least for now I’m talking straight! [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-26-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling* oops I guess that is what happens when you wait to long. Well done.  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RocketRide Junior Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 13USA |
that was delightful! usually i zone out after the first 5 stanzas of a poem, but this one kept my interesting. good work ; ) peace, rocketride ~~Courage doesn't always roar. Sometimes courage is the little voice at the end of the day that says...I'll try again tommorrow~~ |
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Wanda Member
since 2001-10-23
Posts 461 |
Walt; I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. So, you waited a little too long..Better luck next time. Wanda |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Critique you want...good, it is |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Walter, this is so so sad and heartbreaking, my heart cries that you didn't have the time! (big hugggssssss) My heart is with you, and remember, use the force, believe in yourself and follow your heart and you are bound to find the most beautiful love your heart can ever sing for! (sigh) Sad but very well-written, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing! may love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
this is cool. the backwards talk is cool especially "i love in fell...." so this "tryer" doesnt pick up the phone to call his love until its too late. how crushed he must feel. i guess its about time yoda hooked up with a chick though. |
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