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Abigaile
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since 2001-10-21
Posts 112
San Mateo, CA

0 posted 2001-10-23 11:27 AM


A contemporary rug
in a farm house living room.
What a pathetic joke.
God must have a sick
sense of humor, because
no one with compassion
would put them together
knowing the mocking
that the poor rug will get.
It should be on its own
or with others of its kind,
so its individuality and
beauty will shine through.
Instead of being covered
in redneck mud to
disguise that it’s different.
Because sooner or later
its beauty will die if
it isn’t treated in the
way in which it deserves.
And it conceals its artwork
to blend in and becomes as
drab as a brown paper bag.

"I am nae poet, in a sense;
But just a rhymer like by chance..."
-Robert Burns

© Copyright 2001 Abigaile - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2001-10-23 11:41 AM


Abigaile,
A nice write, I enjoyed the read.

Nan
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2 posted 2001-10-23 11:46 AM


This is an interesting metaphorical piece, Abigaile - and a nice entree to our Passionate Place - Welcome aboard - We've got a great community here, and your work will be appreciated.  Settle in and enjoy yourself.

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ctowen
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since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT
3 posted 2001-10-23 11:51 AM


I do see what you mean but isn't it the expression of both rug and owner that gives its beauty a personality? Though what one may see and adore may not be that shared by another.
I enjoyed how your words were covered,
they have a strong expression for holding beauty.
Good job!!

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2001-10-23 12:10 PM



I've seen those rugs, first hand.  Well done!  Welcome to Passions!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




cpalmer
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since 2001-06-26
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Phoenix, Az
5 posted 2001-10-23 12:54 PM


Welcome to passions!
Well done on this abigaile! You have a keen sense of imagery!   Glad you're here!
Hugs
Cindi

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2001-10-23 01:09 PM



Great first post Abigaile!!
We'll look forward to seeing more from you!
        ~NancyLee~

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2001-10-23 01:29 PM


Welcome, Abigail. You have some interesting visuals here, and unique POV. I think I understand what you are saying, that it is easier to shine in a 'comfortable' familiar environment. I must say though, that I rather like the juxtaposition of this rug on the farm, providing contrasting views and moods.
Well done!  

Startime
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Canada
8 posted 2001-10-23 07:41 PM


A very powerful poem whose meaning makes me look inward. A wonderful first poem for Passions. I know you will love it here. Everyone is so real.   I look forward to more of your work.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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