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Loves Sweet Sorrow |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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She flung open the grande balcony windows the balmy night semingly added to her despair tears fell softly down upon ivory cheeks she no longer his love, his lady fair. Sounds of hoof beats filled the air on mounted stead he galloped away pain flowed in flooding her soul her heart cried, begging him to stay. In reflection she looked over yon garden where so oft' they walked hand in hand it's beauty she could no longer see this seeming to be a final reprimand. The silvery moon slid behind the clouds the eve no longer illuminated by Lunas light she sat down at the mahogany writing desk but it was futile, for she could not write. With delicate hand she turned back the quilt of her favorite antique victorian bed and she fluffed the lace trimmed pillows then laid down to rest her weary head. Her heart would not grant her the peace praying dreams to come before the morrow alas though, sleep was not meant to be in this night full of loves sweet sorrow. 10-20-01 On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. ~Me~ (I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 10-22-2001).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Such a heartaching but beautiful poem of lost love! (sad sigh) This poem made me cry both because of how he misses her love, but also of happiness to feel the love in his loving heart and how his sweet memories remain! (sigh) Such a soft, bittersweet verse, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great writing! Very well done! |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is beautifully sad. Haunting. So well written If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hauntingly beautiful.....reads almost like a dream.....  lovely from you my friend...be well and hugssss..... Lauren I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 10-22-2001).] |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Fantastic read, I loved it. Red |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
In reflection she looked over yon garden where so oft' they walked hand in hand it's beauty she could no longer see this seeming to be a final reprimand This verse intrigues me. I enjoyed the entire poem, detailed with vivid imagery. Excellent writing Donna [This message has been edited by sigheyes (edited 10-23-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Filled with the emotions of loss this poem brought tears to my eyes. Such sadness fills each verse that you have penned so well. You set the stage by giving us a view of every detail including the pain that tore at her heart. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle, A very pretty write and I enjoyed the read. |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
Written with a real southern touch to it. I can see grand Georgia mansion and so many other views in this. Enjoyed. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Noah, as always I thank you. Denise- Thanks! Tracey, sorrowfull love is all to often haunting. Thanks. As if a dream born of my own imagination dear Lauren. Peace my friend. Red, thank you glad you enjoyed. SE a fine compliment, thanks. Star, it is and honor that you could see my words in image. Sey, glad you enjoyed. Thank you. Rose, I saw many things as I was writing it just didn't seem to get on paper fast enough. Thank you and welcome to passions. hugs and peace donna On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. ~Me~ (I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 10-24-2001).] |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Lovely write. Hugs, Deb |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Deb thank you for the lovely words. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Simply beautiful...one of my favorites...James |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Nice |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
....in a night full of love's sweet sorrow. Love this one. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Extremely well written, GS...great rhymes...and the story, quite a haunting one, indeed...great poem! sp  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
James, I am pleased that you liked it! Walt, THANKS On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Vandana, thanks much! Walker, glad that you enjoyed hon. SP, I don't know if I intended it to be haunting, but after thought, yes lost love sure can be a haunting thing. Glad you stopped by. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Applause!!!! Oh my...this is so willowy and somewhere in time. Perfectly put together as antique lace. You must go on with this! Too pretty to lay there. An inpiration indeed...and I hope for more. Hugs! Somy~ Sincerely, Regina |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
REGINA!! You have just given me a wonderful inspire, I do hope I can do you proud. Oh........the wheels are turning!! Thank you SOMH!! On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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