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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida 
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NO VACANCY I could roam the halls for days In search for a space to belong Up and down stairwells as an ongoing maze You ignore my knocking and the door bells ding dong How long will I be out in this rain? That comes in the form of my sobs My bones are giving in to the pain Is being there for me an overwhelming job? Filed up to maximum capacity No further availability Booked solid with no vacancy In your existence there's no space for me I used to know what you look like Until now..adjusting to camouflage The more I try to see, the less comes in to focus Seems you haven sunken into whats known as a lotus If you were aware I was having a nightmare Would you awaken me? If you have room for me in your life Why do I see a neon sign that reads No Vacancy? It's tireing trying to figure you out Narrow it down with shortcuts to alter the route but I still havent found what's been lost That being the path to your innermost thoughts I can accept others' advice but it's worth what it costs.. Only I walk in my shoes They are so broken in Time for a pair brand new.. Only you can fill my void It's energy comsuming repairing something That's been left destroyed |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Joanna, this is so poignant. It really is impossible for anyone else to stroll around in your shoes, yet some have been in a twin sister pair of shoes. I wish you well. "Seems you have sunken into whats known as a lotus" [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 10-15-2001).] |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
RosePetal, very powerful read. The longings of the heart sometimes bring forth wisdom.  ~hugs~smiles ~Marie~ |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
"I could roam the halls for days In search for a space to belong" Been there, done that. This is a strong piece....the emotional inpact brings it to life. Well done my friend! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! Well expressed! This is your best poem thus far, it really hits hard! I understand, I've been there...and it hurts, and you lose a bit of yourself while trying to break through his ice...luckily I found myself again and let him go~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Thank You everyone! Melissa I had no idea that you've been reading my previous poems : ) Thank You, I'm glad that you can relate to it. |
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GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? |
Truly my most favorite piece of yours.. u knwo you got skills.... and i know you have them too... such a piece of literature that showed me a small window in to your creative mind....... wonderful... simply wonderful |
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