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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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shadows paint the scene across the wall as I sit with my phone in curled palms, as I wait for a wake-up call to confirm my existence no phone, no messages it's been such a long while that I ponder if I exist even as I wonder why I still pay the phone's subscription bill all alone amidst curtains tall as silence dances in my hall well, in a manner of speaking, roughly, my language has been polished I have learnt the speak of stones and the art of being inert, emotionless maybe lifeless? I have yet to speak I was never let to The phone never rang, did it? no ear ever heard perfect! -!- "I was born intelligent - education ruined me" [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 10-15-2001).] |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
You paint a very moving picture of loneliness here all alone amidst curtains tall as silence dances in my hall Love those lines If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Silence is golden............but sometimes lonesome I guess. Maybe soon it'll ring. stay warm Jon |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sudhir, so good to see your words again. It has been a long time. I enjoyed this, though I could feel the loneliness too. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sudhir what a lonely write! But, very very well conveyed. Enjoyed. ~warm hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (edited 10-15-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, A sad but moving write, Enjoyed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I have learnt the speak of stones and the art of being inert, love this line.... nicely woven imagery into an emotional poem... good stuff!!! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir---Hello, my word to breach the empty room you wait, and reach across the world a hand held to halt fate. Such an emotive write, my friend...take care of yourself. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ My friend it is so good to see you~ 'I have learnt the speak of stones and the art of being inert' Oh ... what a wisdomed phrase~ The 'stones' speak of so much~ We each need to make the time to listen~ *Hugs* sent your way~ *BIG HUGS*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
the rocks tumble and locks rumble the ring shall sound soon This is excellent, Sudhir - it's been some time since we've been gifted by your pen... well done, Sir! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all my dear friends for coming by and for your kind messages. Regards to all, Sudhir "I was born intelligent - education ruined me" |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
"Hello... Is it me you're looking for?...etc" I couldn't help but remember this song as I saw the title of your poem.... Reading it, I feel all the loneliness it describes so eloquently and in such heartfelt way. Nice to see you back Sudhir....& such a wonderful piece....  Thank you **************************** |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
It's a good thing you keep paying that phone bill. That call is only a ring away. Maybe even today. |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Sudhir, a very sad, yet moving poem. Much enjoyed. Thank you for sharing. smiles ~Marie~ |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
this is quite moving, the reference to stones is very indepth. ENjoyed. -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting Sudhir....perhaps business cards...sometimes it takes a while for someone to respond...pagers work best for me...James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
...waiting for a wake-up call to confirm one's existence....Sudhir, that is brilliant...this is excellent writing, sir |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Give me your number and I'll call you  Oh I do love your poetry, yes I do This is such a refreshing creative verse Thanks Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all, O poets and friends, for your generosity... I wish I had some more time to respond to each of you separately... Regards, Sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
We must have the same phone system... paying to be tormented. *S* If I tried to pick out my favorite lines, I'd end up repeating the entire poem... You've incorporated some of the best images I've read lately... the poem is superb! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you lots my friend. Regards, Sudhir |
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