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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2001-10-15 06:31 AM


When

Sweetheart when I ask you
to go to a movie with me
your response was
"we'll see."

Now I don't mind
moving slow
but I really
would like to know.
When will we be
crossing that line
or are you only a
fantasy in my mind?

Not sure what's
up with you.
Please don't make me
wait to long
because I'll be
lonely without you
until when
comes along.

JamesLee
October15
2001

[This message has been edited by JamesMichael (edited 10-15-2001).]

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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2001-10-15 06:54 AM


"until when
comes along."

Wonderful closing line James ... much enjoyed your pondering in this piece.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Tracey
Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding
2 posted 2001-10-15 07:12 AM


They say "patience is a virtue" Michael. lol. I hope your when comes soon  

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

sunshinemist
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since 2001-09-29
Posts 595
Fl. sunshines early mist
3 posted 2001-10-15 11:24 AM


Nice one! Patience, you know how we are.  

smiles ~Marie~
happiness is contentment of the heart

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