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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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Exposed Why do you often stare at me - Like I've clearly lost my mind? What makes you walk so fast - That I'm unfairly left behind? How can you escape my kiss - When you are about to leave? Are you repulsed by the dress I wear - The one with my heart upon its sleeve? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ouch. This sounds like a prelude to an ending. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Chris!! Some heavy thoughts to ponder here tonight... These being just some of them. How many of us ask these same questions? Got me thinking girl!! Well done, love ya, 'Teed.'  ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Midnitesun - not to worry, after all, beginnings are so much more fun than endings. NancyLee, I don't know where my thoughts go sometimes...oh well, you know me. Thankyou both for commenting. Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!You have truly brought to words the questions many of us have asked ourselves. I can feel this poem strongly...my weakness is that I too often wear my heart on my sleeve. Great work. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Startime, Thankyou for your welcome comments. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, this is an amazing poem. Such power of feeling packed into those few lines. Are you repulsed by the dress I wear - The one with my heart upon its sleeve? Those last lines really, really got me. Great writing If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Tracey - Thankyou so much for reading and commenting. My muse has either been tired, or reluctant to write lately. There are so many fine poets out here - I am a little "pen-shy." Hugs, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
a powerful ending, Nightshade  |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
loved your play on words  -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- [This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-14-2001).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very eloquent, perhaps this person is not good enough for you! Cor |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Balladeer - Thankyou dear poet for your response. Chris Lady - How sweet of you to include a picture of Nightshade...always wondered what it looked like. Thankyou Corinne - Not to worry - this was just some thoughts that my little muse eased into my being. Thankyou, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
This is fresh, a new play on old words...Just Great! Willie B |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Willie B - I am glad you took the time to read this and to comment. Thanks, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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