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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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I'm spinning atop a painted horse in circles endless continuum he loves me he loves me not my horse wears pink flowers and a smile but she is a bit dizzy spinning and where she stops nobody knows.. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
(mine is a Carousel Rabbit)  "in circles endless continuum he loves me he loves me not" very well done! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
my horse wears pink flowers and a smile but she is a bit dizzy Not sure if it was supposed to but this part made me smile. Maybe if she slows down a bit, you could jump off...somehow though, I think you'll wait to see just where the ride ends. Never know. Could end in love. I like the way you did this. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Well hopefully in his arms! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Had to reply, Declaflame..you SAID it, that is exactly where it needs to stop.. Thanks everyone who reads this, its my true life right now, just spinning.. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Who says she needs to stop? (But perhaps a straight line makes for a "better" direction than a circle...?) -MVS "Learn to let go of fear, doubt, and disbelief..." --THE MATRIX |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sandra! Next time around gingerly reach over and grab the brass ring!! That's it!! You've got it! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
An enjoyable read....I remember those moments on a carousel. The spinning and my own dizziness. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just make sure that you're hanging on to the right horse. . .  wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
This is a fabulous visual poem! -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Yes, definitely cool visuals, Sandra...this is very cleverly written...I like it a lot...great style! sp  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
You spun such a great image here! I hope you find laughter and love on your ride around. (And maybe the one in front of you on the stallion could lend something interesting!) Sincerely, Regina |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Cool use of a metaphor, I really liked this one Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Your beautiful lovely words are always filled with such whimsical beauty! (smiles) I know this feeling all too well too, and it's sure a magical feeling! (smiles) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet Sandra, I love it! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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