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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
You so needed to be touched and all that could be gained was the memory the one that has haunted in dreams of cold sweat hot tears and lies It did not soothe in stroke but burned in the hole left empty inside Would have been a simple thing to have someone touch a cheek stroke a neck perhaps place a tender kiss on lips afraid to speak what was just under your tongue but I have seen fires burn leaping from dead to dead devouring the things left behind just before they destroyed that still alive Such trails as are ignited by the memories and sometimes by the touch Who indeed does not need To be touched? Yet… Playing with fire Can leave scars. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 10-12-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ron, have you been poking around in my heart?! I feel this. Excellent writing!  "One of the hardest things in life is having words in your heart that you |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
This... Would have been a simple thing to have someone touch a cheek stroke a neck perhaps place a tender kiss on lips afraid to speak what was just under your tongue and this... Who indeed does not need To be touched? Yet… Playing with fire Can leave scars. I love... *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
can't pick my favorite verse, its all good...and yep, gotta admit I have some scars...and there was that once when a dead thing burned me alive.....sigh....great writing my friend |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
the one that has haunted in dreams of cold sweat hot tears and lies Yep, that's the one. The memory that haunts with fire that does not warm, only burns. Applause for this one, Ron. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A most powerful, haunting write. You do this so well, make it seem to easy, and speak so deep from the well. Thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You so needed to be touched and all that could be gained was the memory the one that has haunted in dreams of cold sweat hot tears and lies It did not soothe in stroke but burned in the hole left empty inside Would have been a simple thing to have someone touch a cheek stroke a neck perhaps place a tender kiss on lips afraid to speak what was just under your tongue but I have seen fires burn leaping from dead to dead devouring the things left behind just before they destroyed that still alive Such trails as are ignited by the memories and sometimes by the touch Who indeed does not need To be touched? Yet… Playing with fire Can leave scars. ================================= *shaking my head*.... yes...every line...every single word of this is engraved..burned on my soul...... Reading this gave me a shiver..its like you KNEW what I was thinking..feeling...... this is a moth anthem poet sir....... and a mirror that sometimes blinds me. Tho not written "for me" ... Im taking it for my own and thanking you for it........ Good to see your name back here Captain. When your own emptiness is all that's getting through |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Capt--The scars from not being touched run much deeper, I think..wonderful poetry from you again and still. Glad to see you! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
...left my mind simmering with lingering impressions and imagery. Definitely a "three-dot poem" ("..." --which, I think, is a very high compliment since the poem continues even after it has been read). -MVS "Learn to let go of fear, doubt, and disbelief..." --THE MATRIX |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Boy have I missed you C! And this the bridges are burned....but I believe you can still swim the channel...to a loving shore. Especially with such exquisite verse. Sincerely, Regina |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'You so needed to be touched and all that could be gained was the memory' 'Would have been a simple thing to have someone touch a cheek stroke a neck perhaps place a tender kiss on lips afraid to speak what was just under your tongue' I, too, have missed your writing! It is great to see a post from you...whew...fantastic images...a keeper for sure...excellent write! sp  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
made me cry and woke me demons.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Such trails as are ignited by the memories and sometimes by the touch Who indeed does not need To be touched? Yet… Playing with fire Can leave scars. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ INCREDIBLE WRITE!! WOW!!! ~Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
deep, Captain, very... excellent write! ~Tier |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yet a fire can burn safely in a well protected fire place... Stoked and maintained properly - embers can burn indefinitely... Your words are artfully spoken, Cap'n Ron... I always enjoy your work... |
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