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Shadowed Moon
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Shadowed Moon |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA 
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We danced under shadowed moon the song of the wild our only music I swayed in your arms and breathed your soul drawing you into me deeper... and deeper still with every breath Until we melted into the shadows, together At one with each other, at one with the night **This is a work in progress. I'm open to suggestions. Got any?** |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tara, A lovely beginning. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Tara, this is a very good beginning. . . tell me more about the shadows. . . how they twist and move. . . become one. . . lost in the music of nature. . .  can't wait to see it. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Tara, nice beginning! I agree with Sven, more about the shadows, feelings together as one, drifting where? I can hardly wait too! ~hugs~ smiles ~Marie~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tara~ This is just lovely~ It feels sort of complete to me ... But, it's your dance ... let it take you where it will~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
only one......KEEP GOING!!!!!!!!  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice to see you, Tara - do tell us more...  |
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LoveLetters Junior Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 35State of Hope |
I agree. Keep moving along with it. It is beautiful so far. Love like that is superb. Love has many masks. I am but one of them. |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Nicely crafted...beautiful imagery. That first part "feels" like a complete stanza; I'd life to see a few more stanzas with the same form that build upon the ideas of shadows/darkness and bonding/becoming one. Good writing.... more...more - Jeff |
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BldWhtRose Junior Member
since 2001-09-24
Posts 38Alabama USA |
Great So Far !!  |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
The picture couldn't be more perfect...as far as continuing, if your heart rambles, follow it. Willie B |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thanks for the replies, guys. I had completely forgotten I started this. Guess I need to finish it up. |
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