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Secret Whisper
Member

since 2001-01-25

Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass

0 posted 2001-10-07 09:31 PM

This tiring game you play,
Pull my strings taught, To
Keep me in tow,
As my infatuation wanes,
and my attraction slows.
You dirty cheat
To keep me so long.
As my foot steps stray
You pull on my chain.
And I follow
and falter
and frustrate
and fray
As you play me
For a fool
In your twisted game
You're amused
You're amazed
I'm Disheartened
Dismayed
And you pull me like marionette
And I follow so gay

Quod me nutrit me destruit.
("What nourishes me also destroys me." - latin)

Heather Miller
Member

since 2000-07-19

Posts 409
Bryan, Ohio USA

1 posted 2001-10-07 09:35 PM

And I Follow......

Well written
LITL,
Heather

Without the experiance of love where would we be? We would have no memories to cherish.
With love it brings hurt with hurt bittersweet memories.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

2 posted 2001-10-08 12:59 PM

Good write about loves angst. My suggestion for a title would be Played For A Fool.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

3 posted 2001-10-08 10:38 AM

How about "The Pleasure Must Be Yours" and I might also put that as the first line. Just a thought take it or leave it.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-10-08 11:40 AM

Secret,
Enjoyed the read, my title would be Marionette.

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

5 posted 2001-10-08 12:56 PM

Marionette gets my vote.

Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul....

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

6 posted 2001-10-08 01:11 PM

Kite Caught in the Breeze of You...

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

7 posted 2001-10-08 01:31 PM

Thank you for sharing this. I feel the same way. But, we do learn our lessons. Don't we?

everafterhim
Junior Member

since 2001-10-08

Posts 24
Ohio, Pioneer

8 posted 2001-10-08 03:38 PM

Boy I know this man. But with my friends strangth I broke free.
Tina L.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

9 posted 2001-10-08 03:44 PM

Time to throw off what binds you. Time to be yourself

Topheth
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 297
Texas

10 posted 2001-10-08 03:48 PM

Nice read. Enjoyed. I would go with "Lead."

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2001-10-08 03:49 PM

I think a good title would be "Almost Persuaded" James

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