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the black scarf wrapped
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the black scarf wrapped |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I guess this night is mine, alone with all my sins unatoned no miracle of oil for lamp I shiver in the darkness, damp... I guess tomorrow is the same the bold of shame within sun's flame where all once hidden be revealed stains of blood in scar congealed. I guess I'll never know the truth wisdom understands aloof Wrap the black scarf-- drape me in-- shut out the world escape within... Hide the sunlight from my eyes off to crypt I creep--sunrise-- everything I've known is lies and still I search the truth. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Serenity, but the now is NOW, not of anything of yesterday..so let the sun sparkle from your eyes and walk tall, casting a long shadow..very gentle smile |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
like the way you kept it dark like the scarf-- keep searching There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well...do I say I loved this? Well I did!The tone of it matched the subject, and the images were dark enough to hold me affixed to every word that was woven into a dark black scarf. ~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I guess I'll never know the truth wisdom understands aloof Wrap the black scarf-- drape me in-- shut out the world escape within... Hide the sunlight from my eyes off to crypt I creep--sunrise-- everything I've known is lies and still I search the truth. Keep searching... you will find bits and pieces of it here and there...and hopefully put together the puzzles... Nicely written |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
It is in that "still searching" that you be "still" in the searching and all of the answers will come to you. As Logan remarked. A good write, Serenity... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Very vividly, you've taken on the search~ Your search will lead you to places you need to go~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the answers lie with in....you just need to see your own light... AND see the light in your poetry... the gift is evident...just look at this heartwrenching beauty love ya me twin me only you could give love that satisfies the soul... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like the way that you made the last verse different. . . almost like the "unreeling" of the scarf. . . great job. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
this gave me chills...powerful is the word to best describe...sigh |
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