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wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

0 posted 2001-07-26 12:15 PM

It Goes Well With Blue

Powder blue and burnt sienna
(my favorite crayon color
when I was a kid)
this old pick-up mutters along
a little loose in the joints
like me now, and creaky.

But it wasn’t always like this
this old truck and I
and she.

We went to Seattle first
We were all young then
and the mountains
oh, they seemed so easy
And the Coast Highway?
Well, you know, you couldn’t
beat it in those days
even in a pick-up truck.

Then there was Tennessee
and those homey blue-green
hills we had never seen
and the smoke in the trees
we wondered about
Her lack of experience showed
and they knew we were just passing through
but still, we made friends
in Gatlinburg.

And Jones Beach on that
hot hot New York Saturday afternoon
the melted chocolate bar on the seat
and the sand in everything
I can still smell that surf
and almost taste the taffy
but the sand dollar, well
that’s gone.

She would nap on many a trip
curled up, my thigh her pillow
and we would drive all night
this old truck and I
for her

And the bench seat?
Well, it was big enough
for both of us when we needed it to be
though it wasn’t her favorite place
steamed up windows and all.

You know, there was hardly a place
this old truck wouldn’t go
or I wouldn’t take it
for her.

Yes, even there, finally
and we visit the spot often
muttering along
a little loose in the joints.

I don’t mind the rust now
it goes well with blue.

\\
~=====}:
//

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-07-26 01:06 AM

Poignant, well written...liked this very much!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-26 08:54 AM

this....is wonderful....

I love stories told in poetic form..and you tell this one so well... i can relate to so much in it... very good!!!

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

3 posted 2001-07-26 02:08 PM

JLR,
Thank you. This was fun to "assemble". Glad you liked so much.

Cpat Hair,
Thanks, but you are too kind. I surprised myself with how well this turned out.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-07-28 09:07 PM

what a wondeful story. . . it flowed very well, and I could see the truck in my mind as you told of it. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

5 posted 2001-07-28 09:33 PM

Loved the entire poem, but the final line clutched my heart. I'll be reading this one many times, I know.

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

6 posted 2001-07-28 09:40 PM

Excelent poem well written great descriptions.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

7 posted 2001-07-28 10:31 PM

Sven,
Thanks for 'picking' this 'up'.
Actually, it all started with a meeting glimpse of such a truck and its driver.

Constance,
The final line fell into place like the entire poem had been written for it.  Funny how that works.  Thanks for your comment.  Looking forward to reading your work.

Shadow 974,
Thanks for your comment.  "Great descriptions" as you put it, come from life.

\\
~=====}:
//

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2004-06-08 12:23 PM

And as for finding this treasure tonight? Pure poetic delight!

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