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Corinne
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0 posted 2001-07-11 11:15 PM



When Rivers Flow Upstream

When the poet’s craft begins to quaver
and words spring
from rivers of resentment;
when fears besiege creativity,
the reservoir runs dry.

He might still net
moments of enlightenment,
but they rush on,
sediment to the sea’s floor.

Most days, he treads,
nights he succumbs
to the weight,
blue and heavy
in the undertow.

It’s got something to do with the twins:
age and death
in sharkskin suits;
they stalk in tandem,
having a man for dinner.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey


© Copyright 2001 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Logan
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1 posted 2001-07-11 11:21 PM


Ahh, I know those twins..a very good write, Cor,hon...very gentle smile to a special one
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2 posted 2001-07-12 12:42 PM


Corinne~
Quite a deep river of thought, my poet friend.
'Tis a ponderous write.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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VAS
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3 posted 2001-07-12 12:51 PM


fascinating piece...well done!
RMW
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4 posted 2001-07-12 09:55 AM


Corinne .... Thanks for sharing.  A difficult subject. Bob
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-07-12 10:20 AM


Corinne,
I agree with Marge. Enjoyed

brian madden
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6 posted 2001-07-12 03:21 PM


It’s got something to do with the twins:
age and death
in sharkskin suits;
they stalk in tandem,
having a man for dinner.

WOW Corinne, loved this poem, especially the above verse.

"Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song.

Corinne
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7 posted 2001-07-12 03:25 PM


Thank you all for commenting.

Yes, a difficult subject, about an aging poet whose work is obsessed with age and death. He seems consumed by it, can't see any light left in his life, and he paints a very depressing portait of old age...

I'm not sure I handled this one too well, trying to relate to someone else, ya know?

Thanks again!

Cor

Logan
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8 posted 2001-07-12 10:43 PM


You did..gentle smile
Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-07-14 03:32 AM


as a Gemini, I really apprecaited this one!


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10 posted 2001-07-14 11:19 AM


you did a good job with this one Corinne. . . and yes, it is hard to relate to someone this way, to paint that picture of them for others to see. . . but it seems that you've got a good grasp of your subject. . . you've read a lot of his work, that's obvious. . . and spoken to him on ocassion as well. . .

to show someone to someone else through your eyes. . . through their words. . . this is what's being done. . . and you've done it well. . .



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vlraynes
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11 posted 2001-07-17 09:05 AM



Corinne-
   wow...much depth to this one.
   yep...definately a thinker...i like that.
   nicely done..

   hugs,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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