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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan 
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Fencing Life is like a chain link fence Stretched from mile upon mile Events linked one upon the other The corner posts are changes in direction Major events that shape our lives As the threshold of life was stretched So must each link of life be stretched Life upon life Death upon death Love upon love We learn to love Each hill and valley we span And the rust that eats From the inside out Weakens the links and allows Slack in the fence Addictions are like rust That eats at the soul Keep the fence tight Or lose what it holds. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Wow, this is great! An everyday man made item made conceptual. Very well done! The rust is a very good visualization of addiction! Enjoyed. Sincerely, Rwood |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Very well done. Gives one cause to pause and ponder. Thoroughly enjoyed the read. Write on. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
super analogy well-penned piece |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... enjoyed the analogy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Shadow, Fencing with reality. Enjoyed |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Shadow, you did an excellent job here.. very gentle smile |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Now, the question is: what is this fence of life keeping out and what is it keeping in? -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful analogies here. . . and a wonderful, free-flowing form. . . good job!!  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Rwood, thank you for the kind comments. I wood say that addictions are a curse upon our society. Interloper, Thank you for the comments. VAS, Thank you much. Cpat Hair, Thank you. Seymour, thank you, I like that, fencing with reality. Logan, thank you, my smile is one of pride today. Mark, now mark that is the readers choice but for me it represents the ying and yang of life. It has to be seperated somewhere and each of our lives seems a perfect place. Sven, thank you for the gratious comments. Throw your heart out in front of you And run out to catch it. [This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 07-26-2001).] |
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