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She Carried On
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She Carried On |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I watched her crumble to the floor with arms outstretched in search of more... I sat while she held cold stiff hand and searched her eyes for understand... And yes, she knew her love was gone... but she was faithful-- carried on. And never once did she dare speak as though him dead, or if him weak... She kept him cradled in her palm... She kept his faith. She carried on. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She kept him cradled in her palm... She kept his faith. She carried on. =========================== and that will be what keeps her strong. hugs to you all one day at a time baby love you sen me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
this is so sadly wonderful... I have seen this...and you captured it all...and stil as you know it only captures the surface of what is going on... Many hugs many thoughts many times |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
It's sad yet touching, I can't think of many things that are worse then loneliness. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This is very touching, Serene one....Faith is very, very important, as is hope, and love.... And...they would not want you to do any less.... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Carry on caring. Good. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- This touched me so very deeply. It is so important to 'carry on'. You're in my thoughts and prayers, my friend. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
 This is so sadly beautiful, as always you express deep emotions well~Take care, hun, Melissa! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
A love story of the highest degree, and onto the shades themselves...very wonderful write and observation, gentle one...very gentle smile |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity , As one who has seen the light fade , a witness to the passing of loved ones , this strikes a bitter-sweet chord . Thank you for this . Doc |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
deeply tender, lovely render of heart pain and faith in tandem toward victory |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Sadly enchanting...you captured the essense very well. *deep sigh* |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderfully written and expressed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sometimes it's hard to thank you all for the replies when it's so sad. But I appreciate it..and by the way, my mother was amazingly strong and dignified. But I do thank you for your kindness, and I am just overwhelmed at the outpouring of love from my poet family. I will be eternally grateful. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
To witness a love and faith such as this...she must be a very special woman. You are in my thoughts even when I am away from here. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ A lovely dignified piece of writing. Many prayers are still with you and the family. A *hug* for mom~ Love~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
A very lovely and touching poem. Piece to you, serenity. You and family are in my prayers. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A Very moving piece me Sista. Thoughts and prayers are with you and yours. Hugs Maree. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
This touched my heart greatly, very powerful expressions in this one. Great work. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A beautiful piece you will look back on some day with love and respect, and know that that one touch spoke volumes. God bless! ~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack) |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"She kept him cradled in her palm... She kept his faith. She carried on." This is so incredibly moving Serenity ... what a tender, emotive piece. Many hugs to you for these beautiful words. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
you hit a chord in my heart here carrying on can be a hard thing to do, however it is also the most important, 'they' wouldn't want it any other way. great peice |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah lady, you know there are more than a few of us that you have the words to write our hearts.....you did this one painfully well hugs |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A very beautifully written piece I was so deeply touched by your words Liz |
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