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i disappear |
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mpt Junior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 32australia |
Sometimes I feel like I just want to disappear, I wrote this one night when I had that type of feeling I disappear into darkness Forever and more Absorbed into nothing Unnoticed, unnoticeable Gone for some time, time to release Release the pain inside Relesae the fear inside Release the mess inside Until its all gone Gone to the nothing Forever and more... Though dreams can be deceiving |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Don't fade away on us now.. Nice write... |
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FaeryKynn Junior Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 10Sanatoga, PA, USA |
yep i feel like that too sometimes and that little peice got to me quick... the only bit of critique i can offer is this: your poem begins with I disappear into darkness Forever and more but you end it with onlythe second line... i think it might read better if you added the first line to the very end as well thanks so much for the read |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
nah...this won't disappear.... |
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