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Open Poetry #15

Beyond my means

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2001-07-23 10:23 AM

Beyond my means
It seems I’m sliding
Riding time until it throws me
Slows me down with constant friction
Fiction saves me in my dreams

In my mind I’m slowly dying
Trying to forget my pain
The rain floods down with hopes to drown
This plain pathetic life I’m (lying)

(living) less and less each day
the way the old cling to routine
Ive seen their faces fade from glowing
Knowing that they’re on their way

Beyond my means
It seems im sliding
Riding out the overcast
At last ill sleep with peaceful mind
Behind the fiction of my dreams

mpt
Junior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 32
australia

1 posted 2001-07-23 10:29 AM

very well written, love the rhyming style used

Though dreams can be deceiving
Like faces are to hearts
They serve for sweet relieving
When fantasy and reality lie too far apart
- Fiona Apple

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-07-23 10:37 AM

amazing stuff in this
well penned
especially liked that last line!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-07-23 10:40 AM

nicely done... enjoyed the rhyme..and the form..

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2001-07-23 02:36 PM

Kevin-
   I like this LOTS!
   Wonderfully written!!

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

5 posted 2001-07-23 04:30 PM

enjoyed the read very much. Love the rhyme too.

Charisma

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