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One Disappointment
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One Disappointment |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
One disappointment After another How many times will I be let down? Playing with feelings Like they don't matter -- A smile turns into a frown... Optimism exchanged with doubt Cynicism growing throughout All because: Meaningless words Given without much thought To the hopes they had made And the depression they brought... Such a strong sense Of having been thwarted Nothing has changed Except how I feel... It's easy for views To become distorted When Truth expunges the zeal... Consequently, my spirits wane Clouds condense inside of my brain As I brood Wondering how Some can show no concern I guess it all comes back To the old proverb: "Live and learn"... I don't enjoy being pessimistic These are dealings I try to avoid... Rather, I tend to be idealistic; Thus my feelings can be destroyed... Inspiration can be a curse... Resurecting Death from a hearse To taunt me... Killing me with Memories of mistakes That were made in good faith My hopes and my dreams it breaks... So many times I've swallowed my pride Thinking naively I'd win in the end... Hiding the hurt That built up inside Proving the point That you shouldn't pretend When it comes To ...Life... (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." --Del Casher [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 07-22-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mark, all I can say is SAME HERE! God its hard, isn't it? I like this writing a lot, the style and thoughts flowed freely. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"somewhere in time"...I continue to hope that all will be well and good and even through the disappointments, and yes, there have been many...I still hope... eternal optimist that I am...I enjoyed this! For many reasons! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Well that about covers it. Enjoyed the read. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Sandra, quite simply: IT SUCKS! Especially for a person who would never behave in such a manner consciously or intentionally. This was an old poem circa 1989 which was never completed, so I dug it out and re-edited it just now... Sunshine, I agree, but it feels good to purge the words of feelings strongly experienced, even if they are from the past... Sy, actually, that just scratches the surface, but I don't want to go on about it... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
i liked it. it was deep. the emotion was strong but not too "in your face". I'm not crazy...I have papers to prove it!! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Glad you got something out of it, DYME. Thanks for the read and reply. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Tough skin, but soft heart...We all have it..somewhere deep down. But something that amazes me is, that when I expect nothing, I usually get a great and rewarding return. We are too hard on ourselves. And sometimes not hard enough. To be balanced would be exquisite. "Let nothing offend thee, for your attitude you own, and nothing else." I read that somewhere. I find the disappointments guidelines to where I can start over. Sooner or later you're bound to get it right. Don't give up! The poem provoked me well. Sincerely, Rwood |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
"Meaningless words Given without much thought To the hopes they had made And the depression they brought... Such a strong sense Of having been thwarted Nothing has changed Except how I feel... It's easy for views To become distorted When Truth expunges the zeal..." So sad how this seems to come so easy to so many these days, no thought, no care, just "misery loves company" for everybody to thrive on it seems sometimes. Very well written... like this very much. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. [This message has been edited by ThUnDeRkYsS (edited 07-23-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done Mark... like the rhyme scheme and the emotions portrayed are honest as well as not over powering.. leaving some room for the reader to make them fit their own situation.. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Regina, thank you for your thoughts. I agree: expectations lead to disappointment -- I've learned that a while back. I've come to a conclusion regarding many things: "try everything; expect nothing". I like the quotation you quoted... good food for thought. ThUnDeRkYsS, thanks for your comments. It is disillusioning how love and care in today's world are very rare commodities. But I refuse to play that game, personally, despite the cost... Glad you enjoyed. Thanks, Ron. This one is more open-ended and therefore more universal, I suppose. It started as a song but was never completed, years ago, so I dug it up again and simply transformed it back into a poem... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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