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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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It's stone... the coldness kept within the point of arrow entered in that you dare not yank too soon, but break the stick and wrap the wound. It's stone... the weight upon your chest like the torture of a press and stone on chains to bind your feet and stones you give to all you meet... stony smiles and false kiss greet cobblestones on dim lit street to trip the death-defying feet. It's stone. Awaiting chiseling... It's stone. It's cold. So cold it stings... Alone, alone a dirge to sing. It's lonely stone...remembering. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
tears are here, Ser. ((HUGS)) You have my hugs and thoughts, and ear whenever and if ever you need them. I think you describe the grief very well here. Keep them coming of course. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well you know I know this cold, and it is so cold it stings like fire! Your poem got right inside my gut, and wrenched it, but when you are grieving it is good to get it out whatever way you can. Hugs to you from me, and I think I will give myself one too! Very well done on a painful subject so hard to address. ~ You do this dance only once ~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It's stone... the weight upon your chest like the torture of a press and stone on chains to bind your feet and stones you give to all you meet... stony smiles and false kiss greet cobblestones on dim lit street to trip the death-defying feet. =========================== heart hugs me twin love you sen me |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I know, I've been there too. And Serenity, keep in mind that you're not alone in this grieve, for we will stand beside you, to catch you when you fall.  Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Tres bon! and you know I Loved the rhyme. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, it is all that. I am so sorry, I know how it feels...and we are here for you... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Serenity You have torn at my heart I am amazed at how beautifully you write at this time It is a true outpouring of emotions A very strong poem Superb Hugs to you Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Many hugs me Sista. Thinking of you! Maree |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--It is so hard, yes...just like stones. This poem is remarkable!! I'm so sorry for your loss...Hugs! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Serene, this is powerful, phew I am so sorry for your loss. I am at a loss for words. I will say is Take care of your self. HUGE HUG. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I'm wondering. . . why we are stone at times like these. . . thoughts of you my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Beautifully expressed. You are special to be able to write this in such sadness. Love you Sandra |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Beautifully written, very touching and I'm very sorry for your loss, serenity. May God give you and your family the strength needed in this time of pain. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- You've expressed your pain incredibly well, during such a difficult time. We're here and we love you. You're in my thoughts and prayers. Love and heart hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Serenity, this poem is so heartwrenchingly beautiful. You express your grief so so well.  I only hope it helps you to heal. A thousand hugs, and my shoulder whenever you need it, ~Krista |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I don't think there are any words to accurately describe what you are going through but you certainly come very close...I am very sorry for your loss, KAren. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i'm so sorry...helen |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
You've written this as only you could...my thoughts are with you, also. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Please allow me to indroduce myself to you as this is my first read of your poetry. Forgive me for not knowing your circumstances, but yet allow me to say how much it means to others to pour out the dredges of your heart, exactly as you did. If there is a way to express grief...you did it so well. I'm so sorry. For whatever has hurt you, and made the stones come. Sincerely, Rwood |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
God be with you and keep you strong! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Again...Im here when you need me |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
We are all here for you! Don't hesitate to reach out.  Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Well expressed.. I know this feeling. Hugs to you. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Karen I did not know of your own loss at the time I posted, so I return with heartfelt sympathy in your loss. Like I said, I too am dragging those stones of late, and they are all you said and more, be well, and stay surrounded by love and friends. Thinking of you with all my heart. Sharon x o ~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack) |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
I am sorry for what it is that caused your grief, but your poetry through your hearts loss has now been shared with a host of friends, never feel alone, we will always be here if needed. Many hugs of care and feelings to share. Rick |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so powerful it would wrench my heart even if I didn't know of your loss... Knowing, my heart breaks for you. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My heart and thoughts are with you... I know the pain..and how difficult it can be to deal with the loss... |
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