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Mishtheelf
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since 2001-07-10

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0 posted 2001-07-20 12:26 PM

The thunderous, repeating blasts
Of drum and bass
Reverberate and shake my bones
With entraining power.

The clear, sharp harmony of amplified strings
Cuts a path to my soul,
Bringing the elation and peace of the aesthetic
To my otherwise gray life.

The harmony of all
Demands an entralled attention,
And I lose myself
In the rhythm of distorted clarity.

[This message has been edited by Mishtheelf (edited 07-21-2001).]

SEA

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with you

1 posted 2001-07-20 12:36 PM

I like this VERY much

snowpants
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2 posted 2001-07-20 07:51 PM

This is a great write...very nice images...I liked it!

sp

it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

shadow974
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

3 posted 2001-07-20 07:57 PM

Ah, music that's definetly worth writing about, Great write, loved it.

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

Mishtheelf
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4 posted 2001-07-21 11:34 AM

Thanks for the compliments, all!

Ted

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5 posted 2001-07-21 11:56 AM

Now, what happens when you hear both blended together?

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Mishtheelf
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since 2001-07-10

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6 posted 2001-07-21 12:26 PM

Well let's see!

*adds a stanza*

MARK V SHELDON
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7 posted 2001-07-21 05:33 PM

Love the last line, Ted!

"In the rhythm of distorted clarity."

That could easily be a poem concept or song lyric of itself! I really love that as an album (or book?) title too!

Very groovy.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

8 posted 2001-07-21 05:54 PM

Turn it Up! I'm a music lover sorry. The beat helps you take charge of your day. Wonderful!
Sincerely,
Rwood

Startime
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9 posted 2001-07-21 06:00 PM

Very powerful. It impacts the reader very strongly. I like the feeling of it.

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Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13

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10 posted 2001-08-03 02:02 AM

not bad, Mish, not bad at all. Yeah, i think it's much better with the added verse. Makes it sound.. complete.
-N Joyed Muchley

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

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