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Caress by Night
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Caress by Night |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
The blackness closing in And I can feel The sweetest sense of sorrow And I know it’s real As I lay here with you Like serpents entwined The light fades from us And leaves the world behind It never seems to be healed, This wound inside of me Even the sanctuary of night Keeps taunting me I used to be of the type; Patient, and open to this Now time is running out With my lover, In the cool darkness |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
haunting feel to this...I enjoyed the way it captured the movement of time... passing... slowly..surely... good write! |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Yes, this wraps very well around loss of what is to come, still trying to revive and keep warm, but all the while, sensing loss through fingers still reaching... well done PK! It's been a while! Good to see you've come home! More, please? |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Like serpents entwined The light fades from us And leaves the world behind It never seems to be healed, This wound inside of me" I know I always say this about your poetry, but it fits  WOW! You always pack such an emotional punch. Good to see you posting again "Four be the things I'd been better without: Love, curiosity, freckles and doubt." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The blackness closing in And I can feel The sweetest sense of sorrow And I know it’s real As I lay here with you Like serpents entwined The light fades from us And leaves the world behind It never seems to be healed, This wound inside of me Even the sanctuary of night Keeps taunting me =============================== Beautiful, haunting, aching, write PK The longing and angst rise off the page. Nice to see your name and words here this morn jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
oh, my and why do we have to sense loss even in the middle of a soothing situation do see some grammatical errors, but then we all do that now and then, just need to fix em before seeking publication |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you guys. I know I've been away for awhile. I'm in a weird place in my life right now, forgive me. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
PK...powerful poetry...never easy letting go is it?...welcome home...your words were missed here...helen |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you Helen. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice portrayal of your feelings...James |
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