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Feeling Lost |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin 
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Repetition Entangles me Seems to show no mercy Contradiction Will strangle me Mental controversy Instigation Admires me Pry’s with explosive force Destination Hides far from me Disguising proper course Indecision Bewilders me Won’t let me choose a path Criticism Distracting me Confused as others laugh Unconsciousness Becomes of me Too tired to go on Exhaustedness Now sets me free... Until I wake at dawn. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ThUnDeRkYsS~ This is so nicely done. The flow is evident and the thoughts deliver a punch. I enjoyed it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow..... this is soooo good.  "Criticism Distracting me Confused as others laugh" I totally understand this. ~SEA "Four be the things I'd been better without: Love, curiosity, freckles and doubt." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely said and executed.... Enjoyed the read, and you captured well the feeling.. a pleasure to read |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
INCREDIBLY tight form!! First of all, I'm very impressed with the structure, rhyme scheme, and syllable count. Secondly, I can relate to the theme. This is very well done. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Marge ~ Thank you, glad you enjoyed it. SEA ~ Funny how many of us can relate to this, isnt it? Thank you  Cpat ~ Thank you for your kind words. Mark ~ Thank you, I like making up my own forms and stanza structure, this is a new one for me, glad you can appreciate it... and the message  Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I know that whatever it is, you can get through it sweetie. It sure is a feeling we have all had at once time or another. Sorry I keep missing you! We'll catch up soon, ok? All writing comes |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Lone Wolf ~ Thanks babe Yes, I think we all have it at some time or another, or many times for that matter Yes, we will hopefully catch up soon. {{{{{{{{HUGZ}}}}}}}}Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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