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2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

0 posted 2001-07-18 03:37 PM

I’m sad
Where have you gone
My heart’s been torn apart
My soul has no purpose to glow
Lonely

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-18 03:38 PM

Nice work...
the sadness and loneliness very well conveyed

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

2 posted 2001-07-18 07:49 PM

You've captured the essence of "Lonely" using very few words. Good job.

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-07-18 07:57 PM

You write a very vivid picture of lonelinss, full of so much emotion yet simply said. Well done!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

4 posted 2001-07-18 08:14 PM

The definition of lonely.
Well done.

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

5 posted 2001-07-18 08:20 PM

Nice poem, very descriptive.

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-07-18 11:35 PM

especially love the line:

'my soul has no purpose to glow'

superb job on lonely

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

7 posted 2001-07-19 12:40 PM

Hey...I'm right here....hugs..this is such a wonderful write

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

8 posted 2001-07-19 08:51 AM

No need to be lonely, just look around, she's close by.

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

9 posted 2001-07-21 07:39 AM

Thank you all for your comments. A friend of mine is going through a pretty difficult time.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

10 posted 2001-07-22 10:48 AM

enjoy

ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 727
Wisconsin

11 posted 2001-07-23 01:32 AM

So much depicted with so few words, I can very much appreciate writing like this. Excellent write.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2001-08-07 03:17 PM

You have expressed it well Melton...James

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

13 posted 2001-08-08 12:27 PM

my soul has no purpose to glow

i liked that line too

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