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Untucked Beginning
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Untucked Beginning |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ink black morning Before false dawn And false life begins To corrode the coming day, Wrap me now in solitude Leaving the edges untucked The final knots untied So that if I decide to stretch, Shrugging off the blanket of isolation I can free myself from your Comforting embrace. The sun always rises… And brings with it the day, Filled in its stretch from Rise to set, with some semblance Of honor or pale reflection of integrity To be decided in struggle with Demanding expectations Paraded before your eyes Ink black morning Hide me again, but leave the edges Untucked and free, for in few more minutes I must stretch and shrug off your comfort |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah, the feelings of this are felt by many, but not always expressed quite so well... Bravo! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
methinks you're talking to more than the morning...but yourself and your loved-one as well am I close? |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You stretch my imagination with every word you pen my friend. Now get up and stretch, letting that blanketing isolation fall by the wayside as you walk this land with head high in grand anticipation of life. Phew! You DO inspire one  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat--It is important to have space to stretch...But, sometimes I'd just like to stay in the comfort of all tucked in. I enjoyed your poem! |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
To dream, perchance to never want to awaken into the cold dark reality of life. Wanting to, but so lost in the wonder of fantasy...... ahhhhhhh!!!!! I may not have the right meaning to this... but, it carried me away to a place where I've been before. Enveloped in soft light. See what this work of poetic art has done to me?  It has me afloat on a soft breeze. I applaud  with much admiration~ Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Endless cycles with self-imposed variations... each one altering the next, ever-so-slightly... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cpat- I agree with Martie...staying comfortably tucked in is kinda nice sometimes. I really enjoyed the whole idea of this.  Nicely done. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
an enjoyable read, like the subject matter, another yawn and self debate, to rise or snooze and be late Gloom |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Like this, though I can't seem to come up with a brilliant comment. Sandra |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lady: Thank you for the comment and the Bravo... from you it means a lot VAS: Yep... you are right it is about more than morning...if you want to read it that way ( smiling) Interloper: Thank you kindly good sir... your comment is too generous Martie: Me too... sometimes I would just like to stay tucked in...surrounded by comfort, and hide a while Flutterwings: I am pleased you enjoyed...and very glad to read your comments. Thank You Mark: Is it not all endless cycles repeating with variation of theme and color? Thanks for your comments..they are greatly appreciated VL... Thank YOU kindly.. I do appreciate you taking time to read Prof Gloom: I always enjoy poetic replies... and I enjoyed your insight. Thank You Catalina: A brilliant reply is one which is well received and yours was very well received on this end. Thank You |
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