Open Poetry #15 |
Trusting You |
snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
the effervescent angle from which I see the world has taken me to a higher plateau of understanding-- absorbing the volume of acceptance to which I’m entitled by purely paving the way for your promises... leaping onto this potential highland of bliss will instill in me that lacking notion of trust and execute the relaxed shedding of suspicious tendencies by taking the step to liberate the opportunities... ‘round and ‘round the nucleus it revolves until all becomes formless shapes... but where else in the world will you find the convenience of cobalt directly in front of your face? the brouhaha continues to spin about while lavender shimmers its way into the disarray, injecting bubbles of termination into the blend, dispersing the remaining bits of doubt to the dark blue... -kh it was love that first drew me, |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Sooo powerful! Sooo creative! I loved this Sauni Sauni :) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the effervescent angle from which I see the world has taken me to a higher plateau of understanding-- absorbing the volume of acceptance to which I’m entitled by purely paving the way for your promises... leaping onto this potential highland of bliss will instill in me that lacking notion of trust and execute the relaxed shedding of suspicious tendencies by taking the step to liberate the opportunities... =================================== From a fellow pesimist to another... I relate to this one well... trust is often much harder to come by than the other emotions of a relationship or friendship. anyway...this is a very original write.. as all of yours the vocab is clever and unique... I dont think Ive ever seen "brouhaha" used before in a poem (isnt that a baseball term) LOL OH NO..I got it confused with BLAH BLAH BLAH anyway....very cool write...imagery and intend of message well done poetess "brouhahabooty" LOL... sooner or later I'll get bored with being so obnoxious When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
enjoyed the read but I think I got stirred up in the blue and I'm all mixed up now. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice use of image and language... I enjoyed |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
A rhytmic flow of indigo imagery. I love the originality. I had to read it more then once to really allow me to get into it. To trust is to fully absorb the beauty and wonder without fear. Exquisite write!! Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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