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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

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0 posted 2001-07-16 08:58 PM

Comes now the dim of vespertine,
...as sun sets in the west,
bustle of the dying day,
...lays down, 'fore evening's rest.

In the hush, I stand alone,
...'mid sea of endless grain,
whil'st multitudes of stars emerge,
...proclaiming daylight's wane.

Beneath of the vault of all that is,
...cathedral of all knowing,
I gaze above, in wond'rous awe,
...on glory of night's showing.

From the heaven's, hymns arise,
...unto the soul imploring,
sing the winds of eventide,
...to come, to come exploring.

Beyond the birthplace of our being,
...beyond our mortal realm,
where then and now are one the same,
...I seek night's overwhelm.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 07-16-2001).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-07-16 09:01 PM

vespertine...I would never think to use what I consider one of "your" words...

you use it so well...

Flutterwings
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since 2001-07-10

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2 posted 2001-07-16 09:13 PM

As I read I swayed to the rhythm of this work of rhyming art. How well you paint with so much poetic color. Bravo!

Love and peace ((~.~))

Mishtheelf
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since 2001-07-10

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3 posted 2001-07-16 11:02 PM

*laughs* I hope that someday I can have some sort of magical epiphany and become blessed with an ability to rhyme like you. I am mildly curious about one thing. When you wrote this, were you genuinely lost in that feeling of wonder? I don't think I could have stopped myself from falling into it while writing that. Keep it up, you're great

Saunni
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since 2000-07-11

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4 posted 2001-07-16 11:30 PM

Outstandingly beautiful!!!!

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Marge Tindal

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5 posted 2001-07-16 11:42 PM

Mike~

'Beyond the birthplace of our being,
...beyond our mortal realm,
where then and now are one the same,
...I seek night's overwhelm.'

You always capture a moment ... in stunning beauty.
This is certainly no exception to that practice !
Beautiful beyond the page~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

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KS

6 posted 2001-07-16 11:57 PM

'In the hush, I stand alone,
...'mid sea of endless grain,
whil'st multitudes of stars emerge,
...proclaiming daylight's wane.

Beneath of the vault of all that is,
...cathedral of all knowing,
I gaze above, in wond'rous awe,
...on glory of night's showing.'

Very cool images, Mike...I felt as if I were there, too...great write!

sp

it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2001-07-17 09:28 AM

Mike-
   What a beautiful flow this has,
   and I love the wording you've used.
   Wonderful write!

   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

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8 posted 2001-07-17 09:34 AM

this is truly marvelous, the flow, the use of language the feeling of another era profoundly well done

SUPERB!!!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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9 posted 2001-07-17 10:18 AM

I wish to see the night like you do, Mike...it is reverent awe, I think. Thank you for sharing it.

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2001-07-17 12:47 PM

Marge picked my favorite stanza...but it's ALL good!

As always, Mike, as always...

BloomingRose
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since 2000-08-09

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Florida

11 posted 2001-07-17 01:01 PM

Beneath of the vault of all that is,
...cathedral of all knowing,
I gaze above, in wond'rous awe,
...on glory of night's showing.

From the heaven's, hymns arise,
...unto the soul imploring,
sing the winds of eventide,
...to come, to come exploring.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

It's really difficult to choose a favorite verse, but I think the above may be the best.
I feel entire poem is outstanding.

Deb

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

12 posted 2001-07-17 01:24 PM

This is gorgeous, Mike. I just started a colection of my poems with night themes. Wish I had done this one

Romantic and melodic.
Sandra

thecraig
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since 2001-03-11

Posts 223

13 posted 2001-07-18 11:48 PM

You make resting an adventure. Thank you.

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