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in my silent treachery
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in my silent treachery |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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In my silent treachery in the echoed waves of thought I have seen all I can see and more than any-- anybody ought. Wrapped in cellophane of time (stuffed with fluff of plasticene) I have diced the words of rhyme--- I have seen all I can see... Take the rhythm from my breath. Remove the yoke across my chest. Start the sway of metronome-- mysterious, tick-tock calls home. Every second clicks in time. Every third word calls you mine. I have seen all I can see. I have seen the worst in me. I have murdered. I have lied. I have deafened ears to cries. From my dreams may Gods save me. I have seen all I can see. In my silent treachery I've mistaken tears for sweat. All the things I've yet to see is rivulet of mad regret... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 09-08-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Take the rhythm from my breath. Remove the yoke across my chest. Start the sway of metronome-- mysterious, tick-tock calls home. Every second clicks in time. Every third word calls you mine. ============================ In my silent treachery I've mistaken tears for sweat. All the things I've yet to see is rivulet of mad regret... =================================== I'm running out of clever things to say about your poetry ... perhaps because the poetry is so damn clever.. I could eat your rhymes with a spoon.. (not clever, but sincere)  hearthugs on this one me twin me Well I looked to the sky for my anthem |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Captivating work Serenity.........by the way, thanks for using the title of my piece for your homepage....I feel very honored....thank you very much......peace!!  Nathan |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
very introspective. . . and well thought. . . great job. . .  ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I found this to be one of those pieces that you could not stop reading until you ran out of rhymes. Great job alan |
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