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who is this woman?
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who is this woman? |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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who is this woman who hates you so? she hates the windows to your angry soul, she hates your self taught need for control. she hates your fingers she hates your toes and especially your mouth and each and every mean word that you speak, and if it is possible to hate, I mean really hate someone's guts well then she hates yours. who is the woman? she appears in great distress, how can I help her, if I know her not? my mind needs find for her a place- a properly filed away space, but I hardly recognize her face so contorted by anger and frustration, and hate... I look again for I cannot seem to leave the pain in her eyes behind, she reminds me of someone I knew in my past, someone who used to love and smile and cuddle puppies and suckle her babies...and a cold reality sets in and I gasp... could this woman... that I can hardly bear to see, whose pain is felt as if my own could she really be me? this is old, but it seems nothing has changed, *this* it seems is *my* battle, and so with clenched pen, I fight...sigh |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
You've come a long way... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
You've come a long way baby...no wait thats a cigarette ad heheh o yuh nice twist |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
jellybeans, the woman who can write down her feelings which come from her spirit...that is trying so hard to help you smile, that is the woman you are. Close your eyes, take a deep breath and allow the postive thoughts we all send to you, enter your heart. Hugs. Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very powerful and emotion-filled write.....you are so strong....do you see that?  I do hugs to you |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well, gotta say, thank you, you guys are my strength, I write, to get it out, but when *you* read and echo back to me, I am renewed and I keep trying Nightshade, what a nice thing to say...and yes I do draw strength from Passions readers...thank you so much |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Wow this was a terrific write A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
My anger also wells up when around someone that thinks they can control and manipulate me...James |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
err, Jelly? Please don't read my poem requesting maidenly assistance. I've gotta feeling this would be really bad timing - lol. As for your poem: Yeah, I could see the end coming, but that made the poem all the more powerful, because it personalized it from third person to first, and that is indeed a sad progression. Good luck, fine person. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Very well written JB. It's hard to look in the mirror sometimes. But seems you braved the change and rode out the tide of anger. Enjoyed the read. Sincerely, Regina |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Who is this woman? A friend I treasure, a poet whose talent has grown exponentially, a survivor whose strength amazes me every day. Knowing her, I still can't help... but I'm so very grateful for the knowing. *S* |
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