prayer for the slowly dying (#15) A Non-saline Solution

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Open Poetry #15

prayer for the slowly dying (#15) A Non-saline Solution

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2001-09-04 12:38 PM

Lord, I faltered.

Back I looked into hatred's face
and with eyes wide open, I jumped
into the angry defiant stare.
And surely I say that I found
comfort there,
for so long it was all that held
me upright and above
ground.
So difficult a crutch to throw,
you know I was able to stand alone,
only with help
from you.
But now Lord I failed-
I looked back.

A wicked wretch, I am;
it suits me well.
Sadness surrounds but
it affects me not.
Compassion is naught;
my eyes are unseeing.
The breaths I barely manage
to inhale are heavy laden.
No signs of regret,
I cannot move
to stop this backward slide.
My heart has stopped. Solid
and sinking in my chest,
my ears cannot hear it
beating. My soul is
alone, bereft.
A pillar of salt
is taking my shape.

Lord, the very essence of me
reaches out to you and implores,
please, before it stiffens my soul, turn me.
Liquefy me. Mold me back into
a reflection of you.
One more time I ask
Lord wash me clean.
Revive me
with your touch...

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

1 posted 2001-09-04 02:09 PM

So much I could say about this....
Absolutley a fantastic and realistic veiw.
Well done.....

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

2 posted 2001-09-05 07:13 AM

This applies very well to the wounded spirit of misery. Being not done yet, but not knowing how to get up. Depression. Dying within. As well as the actual passing. Very well expressed.

Sincerely,
Regina

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-09-05 08:48 AM

very well expressed and an ending..that grips one on the second and third reading as well as the first...

my thoughts to you....

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

4 posted 2001-09-05 02:34 PM

a whisper, rwood, and cpat.......thank you so much...I do try to write out my lessons...sometimes I learn hard, and writing them down helps me...I hope....thank you for your kindess

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