Domestic Violence (Revised)

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GhostWriter_6
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since 2001-09-03

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0 posted 2001-09-04 11:49 AM

“Domestic Violence”

What’s wrong with this picture, as I open the door to my home?
All my possessions are scattered on the floor and the reciever is missing from the telephone.
I walk through the house and I see more things are broken,
Plates smashed on the kitchen floor, and the fish tank is busted wide open.
The I spot you there lying on the kitchen floor crying,
Screaming at the top of your lungs “ why have you been lying!”
“The secret is out now about you and your so-called friend’ she said,
“I know what you’ve been doing with her” “and you’ve been sleeping in her bed.”
I tried to think of an excuse; but what was the use,
She’s found out my secret and she’s going to cut me loose.
She approached me with anger on her face,
As if it is my life, she wants to erase.
She slapped me in my face about 3 or 4 times,
If I hit her it will be considered domestic violence, and I don’t want to commit a crime.
She tried to swing at me again so I threw her to the floor,
I told her “this was crazy and I’m not taking this anymore.
I turned my back and started to walk away from this mess,
I heard footsteps; so, I turned around and she stabbed me in the chest.
Now I’m lying on the floor bleeding heavily from this wound,
The suddenly I blackout, and darkness fills the room.

JamesMichael
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1 posted 2001-09-04 03:38 PM

I have ask this question to many women...what would you do if you caught me with another woman...some say they would be gone and some say they would kill me...
wouldn't want to test that theory...this could be a very stressful situation...James

Poet deVine

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2 posted 2001-09-04 06:55 PM

Ah..an interesting poem....I have VERY personal feelings about this so you have done well by your writing to make us think.

passing shadows
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3 posted 2001-09-05 12:56 PM

well, my feelings here are that sometimes we let our emotions control our actions...some people get way out of hand...the mind plays a strange role in making the emotions surface (or disappear). Personally I don't believe monogamy is in style anymore, if it ever really was in the first place. It's a nice thought, the ideal, but not the way it works in reality, after time goes on and those "in love" feelings fade.

I've been on both sides. And I've learned.

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

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4 posted 2001-09-06 03:26 AM

I liked this..as I was reading it, I felt like I was being pulled into a movie script!
Unfortunately, it's serious stuff that happens everyday when people lose their
composure! Nice Work sweetie

RosePetal

GhostWriter_6
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5 posted 2001-09-06 06:15 AM

thank you for the replies... i usually get mixed reviews from this piece because it is such a strong subject... but i am glad everyone enjoyed it.

GhostWriter_6

RosePetal

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6 posted 2001-10-15 12:57 PM

I need to add this to my library.

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