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Summer's Surrender
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Summer's Surrender |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 ~Summer's Surrender~ Shimmering diamonds sparkle on the ocean's glassy surface ... reflecting the day's last crimson rays. For one last moment of splendor, summer's sun holds on to her sanguine reign. In this, her season's finale ... she will leave us breathless and begging for more. We worship her, our Empress of Summer, offering her our bodies in bronzing sacrifice. We celebrate her arrival with rockets red glare, and curse her unrelenting heat in drought's scorching hold. Now the phasing moon beckons and the insist of a seasons cycle summons her. One last slow dance with the turquoise horizon, one last kiss upon the cerulean waves. One last glimpse of rose washed skies ... in awe we are captivated as her scarlet mystery unfolds. Auburn saturated crests of honor rise to receive her. She rewards them with golden streaks of a new season's promise. Her amethyst rays of burning desire reveal her delicate wisps of respectful ruby red love. She slowly fades in glowing cascades ... her jewels are silently sequestered below the sea. Caressed by the waves, leaving behind garnet hues of her graceful surrender as a reminder of her coveted beauty. No stone will ever match her hidden wealth, her allure eclipsing ... her equinox endless. The anticipation of her return held for the highest ransom. Yet another summer's solstice curtains are drawn to autumn's entice. A flawless moment witnessed, then claimed by the sands of time. Forever etched in embered memory. Janet Marie  **inspired by a special friend from up East, who called me on a cell phone tonite and shared the "last sunset of summer", with me. I have not yet seen an ocean or walked on a beach ... Thank you J. for the inspiration, and for painting this vision in my mind with your gifted words of describe. You are both artist and poet.   [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 09-04-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Okay LadyPoetess~ Just what's in that tea ????? 'Now the phasing moons beckons and the insist of a seasons cycle summons her. One last slow dance with the turquoise horizon, one last kiss upon the cerulean waves. One last glimpse of rose washed skies ... in awe we are captivated as her scarlet mystery unfolds. Auburn saturated crests of honor rise to receive her. She rewards them with golden streaks of a new season's promise. Her amethyst rays of burning desire reveal her delicate wisps of respectful ruby red love.' This reads of rapturous admire of that loveliest of sunsets~ JanetMarie ... this is stunning~ A mighty alluring gift of musing~ *applause* *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Absolutely captivating! Your exquisite use of color imagery puts the shimmering glow of the summer sun into the palm of my hand, and in front of my eyes. Thank you, for the beautiful vision you sent my way today. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--You have captured not just the sun, but the emotional pull it can bring, more exuberant than the moon, bright with promise. Wonderful words, friend poet..I have seen it just the way you describe! |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
This is so beautiful. For someone that hasn't seen the ocean....you painted a perfect picture alan |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
I spend half my time on the blue waters and have taken pictures of hundred of sunsets, but I could never hope to describe it like this...Will find new ways to look at an old friend. *S* Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. [This message has been edited by The Rusty Knight (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Please! please my friend get to a beach along an ocean. Take your pen. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow Janet! This is just wonderful. It's good to read you again, take care! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh Janet.....breathtaking image you've painted here....I enjoyed every line. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Winter's sun shall bring rainbows to your snowfalls....Promise! This was beautiful, JanetMarie...your friend brought you a very, very special gift! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - JM, this is so wonderful, it's one of your best  You have such an amazing way with words, emotions and phrases. Into my library this goes~Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, To me this is an epopee. Winkiewinkie Stinky |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow Janet,  big grins, you know I love this the ocean is definately where you need to get yourself to!! You'll never want to leave. Beautifully done. "Deputy Moderator ~ Open Forum" |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Yet another summer's solstice curtains are drawn to autumn's entice. A flawless moment witnessed, then claimed by the sands of time. Forever etched in embered memory. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ A beautiful farewell to summer, as we look forward to "autumn's entice". A must, for my library. Deb |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A breathtaking farewell...fantastic Janet!! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well, if you haven't seen the ocean, you surely feel it. After all, we're mostly salt water and are affected by the pull of the heavenly bodies, same as the oceans...tides, etc. Bet you feel the surf in your veins, huh? Lovely, me friend. jwesley |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Janet, Just beautiful. You painted a picture with your words. Thankyou. Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I should have known to expect nothing less than perfection from the mystic one...this is absolutely a treasure for the reader to behold, and through your eyes to see.....as always dear poetess.....wonderful.......just wonderful. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well, after reading these words. I hope the Ocean doesn't disappoint you Oh Empress one. These are such beautiful words and a treat to end the summer...  Well, if the ocean doesn't keep you smiling maybe you'll need a distraction while your there..  Parker |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet, I have seen the ocean, have lived beside it. Your words paint the most beautiful summer sunset over the ocean I have ever seen. Beautiful words beautiful poetess. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
When your muse gets kicking, kid, watch out world...very tender gentle smile. You really are something |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 Thank you everyone for these wonderful replies....Im still getting used to writing free verse...rhyme being my first instinct... Forgive me for taking so long to get back to this...and for my absence in the forums of late ....its hectic here right now getting my daughter back in a routine with her home schooling. I will be trying to get caught up soon in these far too fast moving pages of blue. thank you again for all these encouraging words and compliments... you guys are the best. my love to poetry land A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. A woman who lies for a man, is a woman who lies to herself. (vise versa) [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
JM - Now that was simply beautiful. I sure wished you lived here, and could write about what I see every night, wow would that be some more beautiful poetry. Again, beautiful and I loved it. *~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
summer solstice photos of the dawn and dusk, a verse of seasons slipping by with scents of embered burning musk riddled by the Time slipped quick while breezes come like whisps of wins the seasoning of truths headspins while Janet sweet dear poet writer of the night with wings fans us all with soft angelic glistenings!! [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Janet Marie- Wow! There are no words to adequately describe the sheer beauty you've captured here. This is just gorgeous! You've painted one of the most beautiful pictures that I have ever seen, and the lovely graphics are merely an added bonus. Your words, alone, create a masterpiece in my mind. Awesome, my friend! Hugs,  ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Neither paint nor pixels could do your verbal photo more justice. When you do make it to a beach, make sure it is Carmel Beach -- around sunset -- you will then realize what you have described here. Free verse with your skills is something to which I look forward. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She slowly fades in glowing cascades ... her jewels are silently sequestered below the sea. Caressed by the waves, leaving behind garnet hues of her graceful surrender as a reminder of her coveted beauty. No stone will ever match her hidden wealth, her allure eclipsing ... her equinox endless. The anticipation of her return held for the highest ransom. just wonderful..... what more can I say.. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
A wonderful, wonderful read. I wish I'd written this, truly! The pix are added blessings, I do so love sunsets and sunsets on the ocean are wondrous. You have described the change of seasons so well. Loved the line of offering 'our bodies' to a bronzing sacrifice or something like that. Well woven! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A lovely end of summer, into fall poem. And JM, get thee to an ocean!!! Expect to cry the first time you see it, though... Happy tears, that is. Cor |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
I would like to select my favourite piece but just when I think I have found it the next line is even more amazing. Jan Marie, this is beautiful and poetic, especially impressive as you were relying on your friends descriptions. I hope I live to see one suset like this. One of my favs from you. "the blizzard of the world has crossed the threshold and it has overturned |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Janet Marie This is absolutely my favorite poem you've written. BRAVO, my dear, for a stunning piece of poetry, one of the best I've read in a while. You wouldn't have needed to post a photograph. It was all in the magic of your words. You have great talent. Loved this one Liz |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Now the phasing moon beckons and the insist of a seasons cycle summons her. One last slow dance with the turquoise horizon, one last kiss upon the cerulean waves. One last glimpse of rose washed skies ... ' 'Yet another summer's solstice curtains are drawn to autumn's entice. A flawless moment witnessed, then claimed by the sands of time. Forever etched in embered memory.' Well, I must say...you've done an outstanding job for someone who's never actually been there...can't imagine how you could describe it much better, even by visiting one... ...but, J, very VERY awesome and inspiring write...I truly love this!  (free verse is cool, isn't it??  )k  tried to write a letter |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 I'll tell you what... with all sincerety, you guys blew me away with these replies... THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH, This is freeverse number 5 for me out of hundreds of rhymes....Im still getting comfortale with it........ this wonderful encouragement makes me think i need to send my rhyme muse off more often *L* Thank you Doreen for the lovely poetic reply...your just bursting with poetry in here Liz...you humble me.... THANK YOU ALL love ya jm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet, this is special...I hope you know that. Your muse is kicking arse, m'twin.The depth of this is as hypnotic as the colors of a sunset...and every bit as intense. My turn to be *shaking my head*... wonderful!!!! |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
So so beautiful. A walk on the beach at sunset is one of the most muse inspiring moments a poet can experience. If you are on the east coast, sunrise is just as inspiring.... May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat... |
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