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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2001-07-16 09:19 AM

Two balloons broke free today
from the dealership across the street,
tied together sailing away
while my thoughts drifted bittersweet.

Lighter than air, red and blue
as though feathered they took flight,
please be aware I dreamed of you
wishing us tethered in passions height.

how did this journey start?
was it planned or happenstance?
when would our Love depart
and its promise of romance?

Guided by a carefree wind
would we lift as if heaven sent?
soft and smooth, skin to skin
to the highest highs assent.

Would we both sustain the air
we would need to aspire in trust?
could we keep aloft the care
and maintain our desire and lust?

For if just one would spring a leak
and in apathy drain down,
strength of Love would then grow weak
eventually dying aground.

I stood there watching, wanting you
as the pair rose out of sight,
upward onward to the heights,
then I smiled in knowing delight.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-16 09:25 AM

nicely done... enjoyed the imagery and the reflective nature of this one...

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

2 posted 2001-07-16 09:36 AM

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Guided by a carefree wind
would we lift as if heaven sent
soft and smooth, skin to skin
to the hieghest highs assent

Would we both sustain the air
Would we need to aspire in trust
Could we keep aloft the care
And maintain our desire and lust

For if just one would spring a leak
And in apathy drain down
Strength of Love would then grow weak
Eventually dying aground
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RSWells This is so powerful...
Great Job!!!!!!

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2001-07-16 09:41 AM

your inspiration took you on quite a flight...as an oldster, I will say that the trust and caring are the most important pieces of love you mention, though you didn't ask for that, I felt compelled. hope I'm forgiven.

twould be lovely if all of love was lofty and ever rising

Flutterwings
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 288
Maine

4 posted 2001-07-16 11:10 AM

The metaphor is superb! I could visualize a pair of lovers afloat on their love in mid-air. An airy write that kept my attention until the very end.

I tottaly got into it. Applause

Love and peace ((~.~))

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2001-07-16 12:17 PM

RSWells,
Well done I enjoyed the read.

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

6 posted 2001-07-16 12:25 PM

A fresh analogy, Richard, and a clever employ. For some reason, I've got Nena's song, "99 Luftballons" playing through my head right now...

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

7 posted 2001-07-16 01:42 PM

Have I mentioned that Texas folk shore can rite gud? Well done my friend.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

8 posted 2001-07-16 02:47 PM

lovely RS...love in the winds of eternity.

~Victoria~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2001-07-16 04:15 PM

Nice writing...James

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