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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Rumbling grumble From the throats of clouds Protesting the slashing cut Of lightning hits my ears Long before the rain falls On fields bent in reverence Of passing wind Another storm to watch I remember a storm of youth When huddled beneath a bluff We watched the fury Felt the finality When it passed Soaked clothes shed We hung them on limbs Then played naked in water Now muddied Until holding you face to nose We kissed And eager fingers fumbled, Stuttered, found pleasure minds clutter freed we fell into each other Later dressing you turned modestly Away from eyes that devoured you only hours ago And your own windowed panes demurred As if now ashamed Things changed then No longer free with me You chose to avoid But I still watch storms And wonder if in the flash you see When lightning strikes close You know how close we came To being struck [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 08-30-2001).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Oh Bravo for the recall of stormier times... well done! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat--Interesting how abandon happens in a carefree minute. I really enjoyed reading this..thank you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice....James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
bittersweet flash of stormier times. Enjoyed the read very much! Charisma |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mmmm, stormy weather....exciting, very nice thoughts expressed here. Enjoyed! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
How innocently the storms of our youth lose their playfullness. Great rendition here. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Stormy yet tender and playful skinny dipping is a lot of fun. I enjoyed this very much, Cpat Throw your heart out in front of you |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I love the subtle depth to this piece, Ron... it leaves a lasting impression, both with the senses and with the mind. Your stuff just keeps getting better & better! -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's all in the timing, isn't it?.. Nice write, Capn..  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nice stormy scene, touched with love. Sandra |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I think that I could most echo Mark Sheldon and the one about bittersweet memories. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I LOVE storms...This is sexy, CH... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ I like what you've done with this soooooo much~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Ooo...Ron, I love this! Your stormy weather memory is certainly one worth looking back on! Very deep write... ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"Things changed then No longer free with me You chose to avoid But I still watch storms And wonder if in the flash you see When lightning strikes close You know how close we came To being struck" very powerful write...helen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ok, I know I already said this, but I really like this, the ending strikes so strongly. You never forget such moments, or what might have been. Sandra |
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