A Handful of Haiku for a Rainy Day

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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2001-08-30 01:01 AM

Rain crossed parking lot
shellacking steel, glass, concrete's
thunderous applause

Whirling winds whip waves
as anchored arbors assay
bent boughs buoyancy

Dryly dirt defers
requesting rain reschedual
mist mediates mud

Cumulonimbus
a Falstaff whose tipiness
bellows roars with pours

Darkly draws the cloak
encompassing earth as smoke
flashing strokes, flushed soaks

I wield the flail of the lashing hail,
and whiten the green plains under,
and then again I dissolve it in rain,
and laugh as I pass in thunder
-The Cloud - Shelley

[This message has been edited by RSWells (edited 08-30-2001).]

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2001-08-30 01:16 AM

Very clever combination! Well written!

2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

2 posted 2001-08-30 08:18 AM

Excellent imagery.
And, we're finally getting some rain in south Texas.

Melton

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-08-30 09:18 AM

Not just Haikus..but clever additions of alliterations as well ...
and as always..your impressive vocab choices.
well done poet sir

jm

(love your signature)

"oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive"

~Sarah McLachlan~

Alan
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since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

4 posted 2001-08-30 09:26 AM

I really like this. Great job in writing.
alan

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-08-30 09:45 AM

Great haikus. Fun, especially that one word sentence. Wow, not easy to come up with that word!
Sandra

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

6 posted 2001-08-30 01:36 PM

You do need to learn to come in from the rain....

enjoyed!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-08-30 02:20 PM

These were absolutely fantastic haiku, and I love the first as this was just such a grat visual combination of words Richard:
"shellacking steel" - wow, you are really good at these! And.....
HAPPY BIRTHDAY RICHARD!

~*If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~
My Gramma, Mom and now now me

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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

8 posted 2001-08-30 02:41 PM

Fantastic use of the Haiku. Well written and constructed.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

9 posted 2001-08-30 03:47 PM

I love these rain haikus....wonderful....wonderful done!!

Charisma

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

10 posted 2001-08-30 03:54 PM

Fun to read!
I especially liked :

"Cumulonimbus
a Falstaff whose tipiness
bellows roars with pours"

thanks for sharing.

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