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Morning Glories (Haiku) ?
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Morning Glories (Haiku) ? |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
Morning Glories Morning Glories bloom Pink, Purple, Violet, Blue Flowers gone by noon [This message has been edited by Amature2 (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
haiku! I like it. \\ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
yes, yes, yes...I do think it fits the haiku definition...it's about nature and there are no metaphors or similes I think you've done it!!! Wait, I for got to count syllables. I'll be back. Oops, the center line has 8 syllables, but removing the and will take care ot that perfectly! The tricky one===vi o let. |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
Thank you wandering glider. Thank you VAS, this is my first try at a Haiku, I appriciate your advice, I took out the word "and". Now I have my first Haiku, Thank You. [This message has been edited by Amature2 (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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ramrog Member
since 2001-08-22
Posts 50 |
brought a smile to my face. nicely done. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Armature2~ Very, very nicely done~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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