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MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

0 posted 2001-08-26 06:42 PM

~~~ You are My Song ~~~

You are my song….
Sung
In yonder years
When there was no time for words
Just for songs
Untamed as they were
Rhymed in the most
Exotic ways
undulating
evoking
and saying so much
in sounds
yet not known to
modern life

You are that song
That ancient
Voice
Coming through centuries
Of tired existence
Speaking
Of the heart
Of man
When simple voices
Of the woods
Have more
To say
Than all the rhymed verses
Of nowadays

You are that song
That tribal
Primal
Song
Pounding within me
And all walls
Of me
Echo
That song
Carrying it gently
On waves
Forever
Crashing
On my shores

You are the song
Of all my mornings
With the forever
Rising
And setting
Suns
Of my days

The song
Softly whispered
With the dawn,
Slowly presenting itself
To life
With the yawning rays

That song
Coming
Endued with dew
Twinkling
With its drops
And forever giving itself
Over
To me
Enslaving me
With its taste
Yet
Forever setting me
Free
With its boundless
Existence

Yes….you are the song
Of my mornings
And yet…
Of that of my nights
Dancing
Under silver light
Forever challenging
The moon to match its steps

You are that song
That ancient
Forever tempting song
And yet…
I know
That no song
In you
Could match
The song of you
Given to me.

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MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

1 posted 2001-08-26 08:01 PM

There is no song like the love for another... a melody which is so mesmerizing as to never be forgotten. A flowing write, which inspires its own music, but may I suggest a graphic correction to your key signature -- unless you're going for complete artistic license, I've never seen one like that in music...

-MVS

"It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself."
-MVS

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-08-26 09:26 PM

Incredibly beautiful. I enjoyed this a lot.
Sandra

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-08-26 11:04 PM

"You are that song
That tribal
Primal
Song
Pounding within me
And all walls
Of me
Echo
That song
Carrying it gently
On waves
Forever
Crashing
On my shores"

I absolutely love this

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-08-27 12:39 PM

The song
Softly whispered
With the dawn,
Slowly presenting itself
To life
With the yawning rays

That song
Coming
Endued with dew
Twinkling
With its drops
And forever giving itself
Over
To me
Enslaving me
With its taste
Yet
Forever setting me
Free
With its boundless
Existence
============================

Oh this is lovely...and soooo romantic...
wonderful imagery and intend here.
superb format and presentation as well.
Beautiful poetess Melody

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

5 posted 2001-08-27 08:23 AM

Mark...

Oh....yes.....A melody of love is almost always mesmerizing.

As for the key notes......I too haven't seen that in music ....I just took the graphic from some site....Perhaps they were attempting to a new format of music....

Thank you my friend for your kind words and comments....

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Sandra~
I'm thrilled that you loved it......
Thank you my dear friend..

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Sea~

And I love the fact that you loved it....

Thank you for reading and your kind words.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Janet~

I guess the romantic was so much in control of me when I wrote this.....

I'm glad that you loved it.

Thank you for your wonderful words
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-08-27 07:18 PM

*sigh*. . . the romantic in me loves this. . . it's wonderfully done. . . just a true outpouring of the song of one's heart to another. . .

it flows so well, and the words are so full of love and life. . . I'm just amazed. . . totally amazed my friend. . .

superbly done. . .

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