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My first Haiku....Basking
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My first Haiku....Basking |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az 
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Basking in sunshine Healing waters overflow Giving life to all Cpalmer God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetCindi~ Well ... Sweet poet friend You can bask in the glowing Knowing - it's perfect ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
beautiful haiku....love it! Charisma |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW Cindy, write on haikus for your first one is just lovely. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Marge, You are so kind...thank you for this! hugs Cindi Charisma, Thank you so much  Cindi Titia, Thank you..I'll try! hugs Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Rejuvination Extraordinary through Solar therapy -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Mark, Very nice...thank you! Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
lovely piece! basking can be great as long as it's not too hot  my cats certainly like it before the needle rises to Mercury's star |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Virginia, I know what you mean...I was just dreaming of basking in sun that's not too hot!! LOL My kitty would melt outside....Thanks for reading Cindi |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cindi- This is really good! Wonderful job on your first haiku! Enjoyed it! Love ya, ~Me "...until you have read the verse on his |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Vicky, Thanks alot! I am glad you liked it! Thanks for reading! Love ya Cindi |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey Cindi, good work on this haiku! It's your first, that's good to see you trying this format - it tends to bring a lot to the surface of our writing. As haikus go, this is a very calm and relaxing little piece... easy to read and ideal to reflect upon. One thing I'd have to mention is that I thought your choice of title was a bit hurried... haikus have a lot of potential for great titles, when you just make it the first word of the haiku it draws a bit from that area. Keep this in mind when you title your haikus, think of the scene and use something a bit unique to the poem.Other than that, wonderful first try! Yours, ~Allan They call me a madman, but I'm not mad at anyone. |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
This is lovely...I have tried but can never capture the feel of the haiku. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Hey Allan, Thanks for the input! I am always a little more hurried when I'm making the title of alot of my poetry...thanks you gave me something to think about! I love your insight...thanks Hugs Cindi Rusty Actually the first time I tried a haiku I ended up with a senryu but when I looked up the definition I learned a little more about it...Thanks for reading...you should try it! Cindi |
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