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cpalmer
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0 posted 2001-08-26 04:13 PM


Basking in sunshine
Healing waters overflow
Giving life to all

Cpalmer

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-08-26 04:40 PM


SweetCindi~
Well ...

Sweet poet friend
You can bask in the glowing
Knowing - it's perfect !

*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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Charisma
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2 posted 2001-08-26 04:50 PM


beautiful haiku....love it!

Charisma

Titia Geertman
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3 posted 2001-08-26 05:19 PM


WOW Cindy, write on haikus for your first one is just lovely.

Titia

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cpalmer
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4 posted 2001-08-26 05:33 PM


Marge,
You are so kind...thank you for this!
hugs
Cindi


Charisma,
Thank you so much  
Cindi


Titia,
Thank you..I'll try!  
hugs
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

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5 posted 2001-08-26 05:43 PM


Rejuvination
Extraordinary through
Solar therapy

-MVS

"It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself."
-MVS


cpalmer
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6 posted 2001-08-26 05:46 PM


Mark,
Very nice...thank you!  
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

VAS
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7 posted 2001-08-26 07:29 PM


lovely piece!

basking can be great as long as it's not too hot    my cats certainly like it before the needle rises to Mercury's star

cpalmer
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8 posted 2001-08-26 11:17 PM


Virginia,
I know what you mean...I was just dreaming of basking in sun that's not too hot!! LOL
My kitty would melt outside....Thanks for reading  
Cindi

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9 posted 2001-08-28 03:49 PM



Cindi-
   This is really good!
   Wonderful job on your first haiku!
   Enjoyed it!

   Love ya,
   ~Me


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



cpalmer
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10 posted 2001-08-28 03:52 PM


Vicky,
Thanks alot! I am glad you liked it!

Thanks for reading!  

Love ya
Cindi

Allan Riverwood
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11 posted 2001-09-07 07:33 PM


Hey Cindi, good work on this haiku!  It's your first, that's good to see you trying this format - it tends to bring a lot to the surface of our writing.
As haikus go, this is a very calm and relaxing little piece... easy to read and ideal to reflect upon.  One thing I'd have to mention is that I thought your choice of title was a bit hurried... haikus have a lot of potential for great titles, when you just make it the first word of the haiku it draws a bit from that area.     Keep this in mind when you title your haikus, think of the scene and use something a bit unique to the poem.
Other than that, wonderful first try!
Yours,
~Allan

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The Rusty Knight
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12 posted 2001-09-07 07:48 PM


This is lovely...I have tried but can never capture the feel of the haiku.  

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

cpalmer
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13 posted 2001-09-07 07:52 PM


Hey Allan,
Thanks for the input! I am always a little more hurried when I'm making the title of alot of my poetry...thanks you gave me something to think about! I love your insight...thanks
Hugs
Cindi

Rusty
Actually the first time I tried a haiku I ended up with a senryu but when I looked up the definition I learned a little more about it...Thanks for reading...you should try it!
Cindi

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