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The Candle
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The Candle |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Candle A candle casts a flickering light Upon my empty page of white A lonely trembling paper stage Where phantoms dance across the page My eyes are drawn, not to the flame But images within a frame Of shadow dancing silhouettes, Small figurines in pirouettes As long as candle wick will last The wavering flame will kindly cast These ballet ghosts as they rehearse On stage intended for a verse To silent music shadows prance To silent dreams the spirits dance In quivering light of candle’s glow They spin and waver to and fro I have become but one of them A twisting figure with a pen A lonely heart in midnight moon Twirling to a silent tune My eye in hypnotizing stare At dancing feet that aren’t there Enchanted with the swirling caper Staged upon my sheet of paper A tragic figure I must be To think these shadows part of me My own dilusions place the blame On dancing glimmers of a flame It’s but a dreamer’s vivid mind Imagination’s stewing brine That stirs the melting taper’s tears Into a dance that now appears When fire consumed the waxy wick The phantoms of the candlestick Vanished into midnight’s dark Til dawning sound of meadow lark In early glow of rising sun I saw what dancing flames had done In every spot a foot was placed A ballerina’s slipper traced Her swirling marks across the stage And etched this poem upon my page Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 08-26-2001).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Good lord Elizabeth ... I love this poem What a wonderful treasure  Rex |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, An epopee if I ever saw one. One of your best Sy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I must concur with Sy my friend. . . this is truly wonderful. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh my what a fabulous piece.....excellent!! Charisma |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You have a remarkable imagination, Elizabeth. You have once again displayed it brilliantly upon that paper! Very well done! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my! I had a favorite and now can you have two? This is absolutely wonderful in its imagery and idea! I do "hand puppets" on the wall by candleligth with Tori, and sometimes that saddens me yanno, a bittersweet time that only makes me wish I had someone "bigger" to share moments with in silence by candlelight. Sorry, rambling, but your poetry always gets my wheels turning. ~*If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ hmmm...they were smart whomever said that! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rex, Thanks, I'm so glad you liked it Sy, Your words always mean so much to me Thank you Sven, From your pen, a ditto is highly regarded. Thank you Charisma, Thank you, dear Denise. I never had an imagination until I started writing verses. This keyboard makes up the words and i just do the typing. THanks, sweet poetess Mysteria, I think any poem about candlelight would be to your liking. Thank you for your wonderful compliments. I appreciate your comments Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ You glow so brightly within the dance of candle's flame~ 'I have become but one of them A twisting figure with a pen A lonely heart in midnight moon Twirling to a silent tune' This is delicately lovely verse~ So YOU !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Elizabeth, you should be famous, you really should. You don't have a choice to die but you do have a choice how you meet it. |
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ramrog Member
since 2001-08-22
Posts 50 |
It?s but a dreamer?s vivid mind Imagination?s stewing brine That stirs the melting taper?s tears Into a dance that now appears Awesome imagery. loved it. |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
What I said about the last poem I commented on...it was meant for this one. No offense to the last author. Your imagery and metaphor are spectacular, it really pulled me in and swept me along without me minding the rhyming that I abhor so much. Kudos! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is the one I wish I had been able to pen.... |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Beyond cool! Indeed a GREAT one! Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Lady this is splendid...thank you |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A dance of delight, a glance at a mighty write, a fantasy by candlelight. Enjoyed. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! What a beautiful poem Elizabeth! I have been away and busy working and not been able to read any of your heart felt poems lately. I' m sure gald I caught this one ....it's beautiful!! As usual I might add! |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
This is incredibly beautiful - I enjoyed every word. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all so very much for your gracious remarks. Your words mean so much Liz |
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